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I Did You Wrong
IP: E38C 4580
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High Times *The Sequel*- Gene Pool Ft. Masta C Shit Happens- Kevx301 Just Me and a Mic- LM* Aiight.. premise is that I've been doing deals for drugs, takin drugs, neglection, everything wrong to a girl.. and I've finally decided to talk to her, cause I want my life right. *Mami.. Mami... I need to holla at you for a minute... Please.. Sit down....* Damn, how'd I get stuck with these rolling papers and a Q-P I don't need this weed, I believe in you and me You told me to proceed with caution So I proceeded often You always warned me that this weed would lead to a coffin But I'd pay you no mind, and spend money on drugs N shit Some deals went down with dogs ready to bust slugs N shit But I always came home safe, to a place that contained you Our home, minus the profane-lang and drugs that I do The way I held you N you held me When I would bleed you would bleed just to make me see That despite nights when we would fight, we were meant to be Me?, I'm fuckin' selfish, lookin' for a place to put my heart But i'm shelf-less So I place my heart where it belongs, tryna not to be careless Taking off ya thong, wait, it's too late, I'm no longer calm I can't do this shit, I did you so fuckin' wrong I fucked up mami "Naw Boo it's ok" I didn't appreciate the love gave and I was always away "Baby boy, today I told you I loved you" And I said it back jus ta get to touch you "Please honey, I thought ya problems were gone" Baby, I did you wrong, damn gurl I did you wrong Mami, the smoking took me no where really It'd jus give me a trip and a chance to stare at ceilings I told you my feelings and I told no lie I get high minus the product jus by lookin' in ya eyes I promised to put the shit away, leave it behind But the thought of gettin blazed had me crazed N outta my mind Instead of hoppin' in the ride, I should've spent more time with my lady Just to let you know, I never lied about loving you baby Sometimes though I get caught up when bigger business is brought-up But I used the money I recieved to get this house that I bought-us We built this relationship outta trust and I decieved you But the thought never crossed my mind to leave you Now is when I need you the most, I gotta stay calm Crazy shit for ends behind ya back for so long Girl I Can't comprehend why I did you so wrong I fucked up mami "Naw Boo it's ok" I didn't appreciate the love gave and I was always away "Baby boy, today I told you I loved you" And I said it back jus ta get to touch you "Please honey, I thought ya problems were gone" Baby, I did you wrong, damn gurl I did you wrong I don't know how to say this shit to you properly But all the shit I been though, it has gotten-to-me "Boy, I don't even care how much you trippin' You think that's gone make our love any different?" I don't know, I'm stressed, 10 percent at the best All I know is I want you to have what's in my chest "I'll take your heart and never break it Baby we'll make it" Our bond is sacred, never broken in two No more problems, i'm too in love with you Listen baby, I'm changing for the better Changing forever, so we can be together Us as one, you're the one N i'm the two Hand and Hand as the night sky fades from blue High as a kite flying, i was once was All because there wasn't a day I didn't need a buzz But now my fix is you, my pick is true Whatever you need baby, i'm quick to do My life was like a broken home, needed re-constructing If I didn't stop this shit before I did, there coulda been some major reprecussions Against all odds, I worked the shit smoothly Mami, tha power of ya voice, oh it soothes me Moves me, my heart stutters, my parts rupture Now we like no other couple, coupled up under the covers Cut out the lights, no fight like last night We spend every minute together like it's our last night ----------------------------------------------------------------------- Aiight.. Thanks in advance for feedback, always appreciated. I'm interested in Collabo's.. so if anyone replies and wants to hook up to write an Open Mic, lemme know and I'll drop you a PM. Pz. -Formula.
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IP: E38C 4580
Uppin'.. ya'll sleepin crazy hours.. I reply to OM's.. where's my shit in return?
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I was feeling this love song. .I mean alot of this stuff was brilliant. .your vocab needs to be upped man, Quite a bit. .Somethings lost me, But I would've liked to hear this on audio. .The whole song was there so try & get it produced & up. .Anywayz. .Props
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IP: 8BEC CACE
OOOOOOOHHHH your flow...structure, please fix it.
Other than that, this was a nice drop, you seem to have good knowledge on writing love songs. not trying to diss or anything, but this actually kept me interested and it didn't come off as a typical love song. Strong piece, with a strong display of talents.
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IP: 0C63 A5AA
^^Structure was fine...
Maybe he doesn't know what it is... Anyway, Good drop... Wordplay and flow was on point... Love song type scenario... Keep em comin... |
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IP: E38C 4580
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By no means am I tryna to start a fight or anything, but the flow was there cuz. The shit just rolls right off my tongue when I read it. Trust me, it flows, or I wouldn't post it until I got the flow down right. Thanks for the comment tho. -Formula. **Currently eating pretzels**
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Yeah this was a pretty good piece i thought.....i also thought the flow was alright, maybe got off at a few spots but it was fine overall....your vocab could be up'd a bit like said before but none the less still good piece....Your structured seemed alright with me....overall this was a pretty good piece....keep at it....and keep dropping.
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