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Old 11-03-03, 08:14 PM   #1
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I Did You Wrong

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*Replied to:
High Times *The Sequel*- Gene Pool Ft. Masta C
Shit Happens- Kevx301
Just Me and a Mic- LM*

Aiight.. premise is that I've been doing deals for drugs, takin drugs, neglection, everything wrong to a girl.. and I've finally decided to talk to her, cause I want my life right.

*Mami.. Mami... I need to holla at you for a minute... Please.. Sit down....*

Damn, how'd I get stuck with these rolling papers and a Q-P
I don't need this weed, I believe in you and me
You told me to proceed with caution
So I proceeded often
You always warned me that this weed would lead to a coffin
But I'd pay you no mind, and spend money on drugs N shit
Some deals went down with dogs ready to bust slugs N shit
But I always came home safe, to a place that contained you
Our home, minus the profane-lang and drugs that I do
The way I held you N you held me
When I would bleed you would bleed just to make me see
That despite nights when we would fight, we were meant to be
Me?, I'm fuckin' selfish, lookin' for a place to put my heart
But i'm shelf-less
So I place my heart where it belongs, tryna not to be careless
Taking off ya thong, wait, it's too late, I'm no longer calm
I can't do this shit, I did you so fuckin' wrong

I fucked up mami
"Naw Boo it's ok"
I didn't appreciate the love gave and I was always away
"Baby boy, today I told you I loved you"
And I said it back jus ta get to touch you
"Please honey, I thought ya problems were gone"
Baby, I did you wrong, damn gurl I did you wrong

Mami, the smoking took me no where really
It'd jus give me a trip and a chance to stare at ceilings
I told you my feelings and I told no lie
I get high minus the product jus by lookin' in ya eyes
I promised to put the shit away, leave it behind
But the thought of gettin blazed had me crazed N outta my mind
Instead of hoppin' in the ride, I should've spent more time with my lady
Just to let you know, I never lied about loving you baby
Sometimes though I get caught up when bigger business is brought-up
But I used the money I recieved to get this house that I bought-us
We built this relationship outta trust and I decieved you
But the thought never crossed my mind to leave you
Now is when I need you the most, I gotta stay calm
Crazy shit for ends behind ya back for so long
Girl I Can't comprehend why I did you so wrong

I fucked up mami
"Naw Boo it's ok"
I didn't appreciate the love gave and I was always away
"Baby boy, today I told you I loved you"
And I said it back jus ta get to touch you
"Please honey, I thought ya problems were gone"
Baby, I did you wrong, damn gurl I did you wrong

I don't know how to say this shit to you properly
But all the shit I been though, it has gotten-to-me
"Boy, I don't even care how much you trippin'
You think that's gone make our love any different?"
I don't know, I'm stressed, 10 percent at the best
All I know is I want you to have what's in my chest
"I'll take your heart and never break it
Baby we'll make it"
Our bond is sacred, never broken in two
No more problems, i'm too in love with you

Listen baby, I'm changing for the better
Changing forever, so we can be together
Us as one, you're the one N i'm the two
Hand and Hand as the night sky fades from blue
High as a kite flying, i was once was
All because there wasn't a day I didn't need a buzz
But now my fix is you, my pick is true
Whatever you need baby, i'm quick to do
My life was like a broken home, needed re-constructing
If I didn't stop this shit before I did, there coulda been some major reprecussions
Against all odds, I worked the shit smoothly
Mami, tha power of ya voice, oh it soothes me
Moves me, my heart stutters, my parts rupture
Now we like no other couple, coupled up under the covers
Cut out the lights, no fight like last night
We spend every minute together like it's our last night

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Aiight.. Thanks in advance for feedback, always appreciated. I'm interested in Collabo's.. so if anyone replies and wants to hook up to write an Open Mic, lemme know and I'll drop you a PM. Pz.

-Formula.
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Old 11-04-03, 04:16 PM   #2
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Uppin'.. ya'll sleepin crazy hours.. I reply to OM's.. where's my shit in return?
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Old 11-04-03, 05:52 PM   #3
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I was feeling this love song. .I mean alot of this stuff was brilliant. .your vocab needs to be upped man, Quite a bit. .Somethings lost me, But I would've liked to hear this on audio. .The whole song was there so try & get it produced & up. .Anywayz. .Props
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Old 11-04-03, 06:03 PM   #4
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OOOOOOOHHHH your flow...structure, please fix it.
Other than that, this was a nice drop, you seem to have good knowledge on writing love songs. not trying to diss or anything, but this actually kept me interested and it didn't come off as a typical love song. Strong piece, with a strong display of talents.
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Old 11-04-03, 06:15 PM   #5
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^^Structure was fine...

Maybe he doesn't know what it is...

Anyway, Good drop...

Wordplay and flow was on point...

Love song type scenario...

Keep em comin...
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Old 11-04-03, 06:42 PM   #6
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Originally posted by S.DoT.KiddZ
OOOOOOOHHHH your flow...structure, please fix it.


By no means am I tryna to start a fight or anything, but the flow was there cuz. The shit just rolls right off my tongue when I read it. Trust me, it flows, or I wouldn't post it until I got the flow down right. Thanks for the comment tho.

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Old 11-04-03, 07:13 PM   #7
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Yeah this was a pretty good piece i thought.....i also thought the flow was alright, maybe got off at a few spots but it was fine overall....your vocab could be up'd a bit like said before but none the less still good piece....Your structured seemed alright with me....overall this was a pretty good piece....keep at it....and keep dropping.
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