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Old 11-05-03, 12:26 AM   #1
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Second Best(feat: Deva and Gene Pool)

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Masta C:
Can never seem to pass the finish-line, Cause im always second best…
While you go and diminish-minds, like you did to all the rest…
Went back out with your ex, said if things went wrong id be next…
Feels like I have a hex, and the way I cant win is really vexed..
Might as well say im in last place, feels like im lost in space, cause im a disgrace..
I lost the race, couldn’t keep my pace, and im tired of following the chase..
The truth is hard, something im not, left me with my heart, fully scarred..
From the start, I didn’t full fill my part, now I need a emotional guard…
You left me in two, split down the middle now everybody knows whats within you..
Nobody has no idea what kind of stress I been through, and all you ever did was grin too..

Deva:
Nobody likes being second best to the rest without regret
I say fuck bitches that making you feel like ya under a threat
Why protect just redirect, feeding back, make her feel the wreck
Why should it be your neck put out cos throughout its not a test
I want the bitches not witches, casting spells like bottom grade midgets
Don't want a 'Gomez' want a 'Lopez' sucking on my digits
If ya not the first ya comin out worst, so ya not livin to its limits
Not me im bringing out singing out, first grade like I give it
I get it, laid by gorgeous brunettes on the nest, leave their hair messed
If ya second in a race you lost, first ya want, so the ladies caress

Gene Pool:
I’m always second best to my friends, always second best when it comes to chicks in bed/
always fuckin second best, when compared to tha rest! I juss say, fuck this game/
it ain’t worth tha stress, might as well redeem my lack of breath/
cuz I’m chokin, when I be smokin, tryin to forget, but these drugs keep me tokin/
till I find myself trippin, listen, cuz that light comes with quickness/
just let it take u from this world, cuz it ain’t worth, all these broken emotions/
corrupted visions, a part of us, a life we all live, when will it stop?/
Let us show u the truth between him, her, and u, think u got a chance?
Shit dude, keep foolin ya’self, thinkin it’s true!/
Cuz best friends is a reality as clear as death/
juss rememba, ur always second best!/
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Old 11-05-03, 08:09 AM   #2
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lets get some feedback thrown this was plz.........
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Old 11-05-03, 12:24 PM   #3
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ya peeps reppin Corrupted Visions so let's get some feedback up in here. muchly appreciated. thanx in advance peace.
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Old 11-05-03, 04:11 PM   #4
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Yeah if you check this piece of leave us some feedback on it, its much appreciated, thanks.
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Old 11-05-03, 07:50 PM   #5
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This is getting slept on big time lol, give us some feedback on this if you check it out, its much appreciated, thanks.
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Old 11-05-03, 09:42 PM   #6
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damn this some tight shit... u guys god mad skills like fo real... did yall keystyle dat or did u perfect it first
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Old 11-05-03, 10:07 PM   #7
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shit this pritty close...
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Old 11-06-03, 02:30 AM   #8
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Damn you all are good..you got all the right stuff..mad skills fo sure..good luck with all yalls crew..peace out later............................................. ......
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Old 11-06-03, 08:26 AM   #9
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pretty nice verses from all...posted in order of goodness...masta C came the best...deva went off topic for like a line...not bad tho..gene pool was pretty good..wasnt feelin ya rhyme scheme or structure to much tho..overall..nice colabbo..keep it commin

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Old 11-06-03, 03:45 PM   #10
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Hey thanks for the feedback so far, keep the feedback coming in, its much appreciated, thanks.
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Old 11-06-03, 10:42 PM   #11
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yo thanx for all the feedback so far peeps. so keep hittin this shit up ppl's muchly appreciated thanx in advance. peace.
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<center><table style=filter:GLOW(color=black)>Giving Sight A Third Eye</table></center>
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Old 11-07-03, 12:19 AM   #12
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that shit was tight dawg nycely done aiight


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Old 11-07-03, 12:25 AM   #13
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Masta shined on this right here.. he had a cool multie usage & a couple metaphors in it, some witty shit yall need to fix the structure a little the lines are mad stretched & that takes away from the flow unless it's a flawless flow,

make ur lines kind of even..like..

line 1...............................................
line 2...............................................

or

line 1...............................................
line 2.......................
line 3...............................................
line 4.......................

it also makes it easier on the readers & helps us to continue & not just be like FUCK IT..

nice lil read here.. stay up..
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