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the shook ones reply by loco


I was born to flow wit the best I can stand up and blast anyone in the chest \

Invest ur money wise cuzz ill take it after I mace u in the eye’s’ slashing ur thighs \

I’m a crip in disguise looking for money even when I sell pies greed is all u see in my eyes\

I’m smart leaving u wit no trace erased wit out a face not caring for a disgrace \

My army high standing wit guns ready to die never to be defied im on the easy ride so pick Ur side\

Cuzz im colder wit every note every toke’’ big green smoke’’ you cant fuck wit me’ I don’t even care if ur the’’ pope’’ u going to float drown!! well u get choked then put six feet in the ground\

A dead fish at Ur door and u become copp caller little hore afraid of war \

Cappen chrome’s snappen toe’s flatten foe’s just like that u be come a coward homes \

So remember I will not render ill come at all yall any time through Jan to December \

24\7 open like 7\11 seven shots from thee eleven hope ur moms prays to heaven cuzz ur catching it hard \

Left in wheel chair mentally scared changing there name and hiding when they see my car\

P.c. wear u be mocking me get raped and now it’s a democracy I said stop it ‘G’ \

The crew u roll wit is flop all u spark is’ the rock’ well I serve it on the block non stop\

Crop I smoke non u all can get it if u try u get wet it’s in my back yard wear I wait wit the tekks \

Niggers go to the depth fucking hore ask me questions now u got shell shock wit indigestion the ratts righting confessions \

Now I see life in corrections running wit so many confessions looking for copps at every corner ready to blast and make kids happy wit organ donors im a solider \

Fighting to live rendering nothing im hear to take a big time hustler down to a small time buster u blinded by diamond cluster blood spread like ketchup my chrome wett ya \

Ur home’s set u up’ u ate’ and ‘u got laid’ by the shotty now u found wit a head less body \

You can’t stop me I’m on top its like Ur short like leprechauns I release shells and now Ur gone\

Im a king ur a pond in this game u don’t wana crash wit this train cuzz the last thing pepeole see of u is ur frame on the casket it will never be the same u rotten basterd\
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This was alright here i thought....structure was ok...structure could use some work though, lines were stretched out, try to shorten them down a bit though...multies were ok, you should improve on those a bit though...but overall this was ok...keep at it.

aight...
structure was fucked dawg... dont double space... and
dont stretch your bars...
make each 2 lines rhyme... like you put it,
it messed up ya flow...
but other than that, you had some pretty good content...
just keep elevatin dawgy...
~AshY~

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Yah.. your bar structure really threw me off a bit here

Try doing your lines like this..

I'm the shit yadda yadda yadda
This is big so it's it yadda yadda
I like cats blah blah blah blah
But I don't wear hats blah blah

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i agree that the structure needs sorted out...quit it with the spacing...and shorten some of ya lines......looking past that....it wasnt too bad.....jus work on ya miult's n shit,,,,try and get them flowing better........pZ.....