who cares on this earth for a person like me?
NOT I. who are you? I'M JOHNNY C.
johnny c? strange name, yet it's stranger still
that i get my topics from the voices on my soul's windowsill.
AND WHO ARE YOU?!?! NOTHING!!! THAT'S WHAT U R 2 HER!
who u talkin about? M**** BINZER!
but --- i live 4 her, that kick-ass girl
and 2 me, she is the world!
AND OH MY GOD, U MAKE ME HURL-
YOU SCITZO, YOUR MIND'S A WHIRL!
i hate you, johnny, go away
NO. I THINK I'D RATHER STAY.
i hate you, johnny, go awaaaaaay!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
NO, I FEEL I'D RATHER STAY.
i hate you johnny, go awaaaaaay!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
I'LL STILL COME BACK ANOTHER DAY.

*lower-case= me upper-case= Johnny*

woah pyscho

this was... uhh... interesting. I like HOW its written, but.. you didnt use much vocabulary, and you didnt express any emotions or depict any pictures in my mind. The rhyme seems rather forced to me. I like the UPPERCASE and lowercase.. meaning I like the way it was two "people"'s thoughts.

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Lol, good drop. Little out of the ordinary, but it was good. In a way it was funny, yet it also seemed to show internal conflict. Idk, maybe its just me. Scheme and structure were nice. Made me think about a man deplicting on whether he was right for a girl or not. Overall, I liked it. Keep em comin. Much respect.

wow...I've thought about doin a song like this before..and probably still will...u had a lack of vocabulary but you really wrote this and made it LOOK like some psycho shit....I enjoyed it basically

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Schitzophrenia, for the record, is a disease of dissaciotiveness with reality. For the most part, it involves seeing and hearing things that are not there. Voices in the head and even multiple personalitys don't have much correlation with actual schitzophrenia.

As for your poem... it was... hm... as if John Cena of the WWE body slammed either of ICP and merged into one.

Take that as a compliment if you will.

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I'm taking that as a compliment.

you seem to be letting off some emotions and feelings that you have kept inside, and you've now found a place to release this anger from inside of you. i think you may of gone trough some personal tramua. any ways, nice drop wordplay could of been a little more expansive.

peace

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