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11-13-03, 07:21 PM
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This is my first post!
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The Final Fatality
IP: 27B1 49F3
Repped
Word Perfect Disses [Chrit] Public Enemy Origin Ill Diss: Ill Mental Nigga simplicty - just a pussy wit a mentality fuckin wit LoCo its 'The Final Fatality' cuz uve come against me aint talkin that boo-boo shit get yo hat-split when my gat-twist yea im pissed... nigga a G-Unit playlist dont make u gangsta as I slip the crip walk past the drip dont flip as i trip into your supply..cuz cats demand the right brand - no some grass mixed wit oregano and alil dro Oh-no - as my knife enters ur wind pipe i swipe the air out of ur breath cuz bitch u just ghost write he thinks 'freestylin' means keystlin memorizin the dropin it on a mic cake ass nigga wit frostin for the top u can tell hes fake- he serves 2 days in pen comes out and says he from 'D - blok' thinkin hip-hop is a dance as i 'hoover' the 'shake' into your toes cuz u got steped on Why do i even post here - shit gon get slept on Blue killa B to the G is illa 1
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11-13-03, 07:26 PM
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IP: 5AF5 5CA5
i cant say this was very good cos it wasn't, your flow fell off and your structure was all over, with a basic rhyme scheme, i would use a more constant scheme.....Pc
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11-13-03, 07:42 PM
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Banned
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IP: 872B E5DF
that shit was weak.
get off the dr sues rhymes, rhyming crip slip drip flip doesnt take alot of skill. you had no quoteables. try writing about a topic instead of this im a gangster and your not shit. its to basic. if your going to do gangster rap say something that has never been said. make it your own. work on your structure to, one line has 4 words, then the next has 19 words, it throws off the whole flow. you just need to elevate on everything |
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