Sup folks, been awhile.Tha idea behind this is I had to write sumthin for History class last yr puttin myself in tha position of a Jew durin' WWII.Hope yall enjoy it any feed< is welcome.

It’s come to my attention that the situation is beyond drastic/
The sights of this horror does more than define tragic/
I wish I was deaf, so I wouldn’t hear the screams or blasting/
Someone gets killed, they’re not worthy enough to be put in a casket/
The family has no right to bury them, or mourn through black fabrics/
And the amount of deaths is multiplying, it’s overly massive/
All you can see are piles of beaten corpses/
Germans show emotion of happiness, they don’t weep, but rejoice it/
My people need some kind of emotional and physical corroboration/
Until this is done, the Earth can’t do its proper rotation/
Our children are used as human specimen for scientific observations/
It all started because of a man who clearly lost all of his patience/
How can a nation, follow someone who practices blasphemy/
He has half of the World’s support, even the Japanese/
Every time I want to stand out my blood races, my heart fires/
Only thing holding me back is the heavy artillery and barbed wires/
They must think all Jews are like Jesus, giving us personal crucifixions/
I have a lot of things to say in objection but...who will listen? /
All they want to see is me stepping on a planted land mine/
The people in that sanctimonious society can’t be part of mankind/
If we believe we have the fighting power to fight these cowards/
We can reach the top, the ‘height is ours’ but maybe Eisenhower/
Can construct another plan and lead us to freedom/
Hope it’s soon, I’m running out of wounds to bleed from/
I have many scars, both physical and mental/
The soldiers beat us everyday, and believe me they’re not gentle/
I’m writing all this down hoping someone will find this paper/
Maybe it will even be published and read 30 years later/
So all can hear the story of a girl who’s life was below 3rd rank/
Everyone can know the last days of Anne Frank*

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Thanx for lookin,Stay ^
-Avi

god damn... you captured the shit they did to them.. you captured the way they felt, you depicted everything just so perfectly.. you sent chills down my spine with this. When we're learning about the Holocaust in school it kills me.. this poem jus brought everything back to me that i've learned... wow.. this is.. just one of the greatest poems. Fuckin ill. Niice ass piiece.

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^thanx for the reply,u got sum ill sh!t too.Uppin for more
-Avi

Wow, great job. You had a massive amount of imagery and it made it great. It made me think as if i was actually standin there livin through it. That is one of the key things in poetry. If you can picture it, you live it, you enjoy it and it hits you hard. Structure and everything was great. Overall great job and I really enjoyed it. It hit me pretty hard, which not much stuff does. Great job. Keep it up. Much respect.

real nice piece....it really captured the whole holocaust experience...alot of good imagery in there....really made for a good read....keep it up...

Thanx for tha replies,really appreciated.Ya'll got sick stuff as well.Stay ^
-Avi