Posted In: Rule, sthash, obsenity

Masta C:
Feels like my life is going to hell, every things going down hill..
Finding things out I shall not tell, things that are making me frown still…
Things are just not what they used to be, They were great and joyous…
Now everybody just goes right through me, and life does nothing but toy us..
Its like living in a game that you cannot win, but yet you still try…
Fill eyes with tears cause all I do is fail, gotta get away, will I?…
Probably not cause it feels like my legs are cemented in the ground..
I want out, I try to shout, my voice isn’t heard yet every ones around…
Every things just tumbling, and im stumbling, and I just fall…
Voice is mumbling, no one hears me so just fuck y’all…

Gene Pool:
killa in a heart, demons juss waitin to spark/
will I be able to control it when it starts? help me cuz I'm starged/
parched, when I sip this blood filled wine with pride/
thinkin things all so fine, but it comes crashin, with a fallin dime/
why am I wastin all ma time? with all these lies and fights/
christ just come and take me from this plight/
cuz I can't strive, in this line of life/
but it gets twisted when my words ain't heard/
and I'll juss flip u the bird cuz u so absurd/
and the rage deep down begins to burn/
when u throw that first fist, u betta make sure it hurts/
or I'll stab u, and send u off in a hearse/
cuz no longer, is care, honesty, truth all worth/
fuck it, juss kill ya loved ones, an emerse/
34 names into a graveyard, an hear u scream a curse/

aight, C: u were aight, not to BLAM IN UR FACE type but a typical descent spit none tha less...

Gene: same thing, didn't really come off to hard but was good, tha flow would have been better wit some filler words like 'and' or 'tha'...

overall: tha two verses didn't match in flow so i was forced to read one then tha next so not necessarily tha greatest collab i've read, more of a two verses put into one song type of deal...

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I wasn't feelin this collab at all, ya'll came with two different rhyme schemes and different flow and that made readin this piece a chore. Nothin quotable. Gene, work on structure and flow. Masta, keep flow as is, ya verse was good. Gene, ya verse was OK, nothing to brag about, it's jus that yours seemed like it was off, like you ain't know what to do with it. Bad verse compared to your others. Least ya'll reppin CV good tho, keep droppin.

-Formula.

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i agree with the others

This Gene Pool cat came correct wit the topic and all-around verse, but his structure is like a broken brick...Masta C, you know what up... you did alright compared to others that you've done...