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Old 11-27-03, 09:13 AM   #1
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The Charles Bronson Blues

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check it out yo, i am about to begin the show/
cant miss it, twice the action like bo jackson/
boom! got your attention like 2 boeings crashin/
smashin through LA streets like race car track meets/
its time for this vigilante to get up and get down with two heats/
take your seats before i dirty yall sheets full of blood/
sniping the scene so you can call me god like muhamad/
this website be posting more bullshit than missiles in bagdad/
infected so now i gotta call hazmat and buy a few bats/
louiville sluggers to knock some sense in that cranium shaft/
now you will know, and when you know it will be half the battle/
don't fuck with this snake if his words make you rattle/
its now or never so come forward sober, safe with a chouffer/
this ryme is for the underground people or da "goafers"/
rise up against the nonsense being posted by m.c posers/
i be out plowing these sunz of bitches with a bulldozer/
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Old 11-27-03, 10:32 AM   #2
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I'm feelin this......the flow was on point......ya rhymescheme and creativity was nice on this piece........there was only a few parts that I didn't understand and you should up complexity a tiny bit some parts got simple but overall it was a nice drop......short and to the point pretty much......keep spittin 1
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Old 11-27-03, 03:39 PM   #3
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Yeah this was pretty good....Your structured was pretty good on this piece.....The flow was good as said before me, didnt get off really......Your vocab was pretty good as well, could be up'd a bit though but nothing major...but overall id say this was a good drop...keep at it and keep dropping.
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