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I'm slitting my wrists now, watching the blood drip down,
I'm making a mark on my wrist like the one you made on my heart, Dont tell a girl you love her, if you don't really mean it, It's gunna end her world so quickly, she'll have never see it coming, And then its going to be your fault, and you wont know what to do, You're gunna see her obituary in the paper, or hear it on the news, She'll sit and watch the blood as it drips down her left arm, With her other hand she'll write a poem to you that doesnt even rhyme, Blood'll stain the paper shes writing on, along with some tears, Even if she makes it through her river flowing blood, She won't be able to trust you because of what you've done, That's whats gunna kill her the most, knowing that she once did, She trusted you with all her heart, but look at what happened, You broke her heart, and her trust, all in one shot, you say you didnt mean it, but thats how it ended up, Now her head is getting dizzy as shes thinking 'what the fuck did i do' You fucked her life up and now she killed herself over you.
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Die over love huh
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Gurl, tell me bout it. I wrote something like this in one of my journals for my boyfriend. I trusted him completely with everything that I had. Then he dropped me by cheatin on me. I often think about suicide. Seems like it grows nearer to me as the pain increases. I have recently wondered if by chance you were my twin. Kinda korny but true. Its like you go through the same EXACT shit that I do. Believe me, I can relate to everything that you have posted. You truely touched me with this one. All of your work has, but this one got me deep in the heart. Idk how you do it, but ya did it. Idk if you go through this or not, but I sure as hell do, and its kind of scary if you dont. Like I said, it may sound korny, but believe me, its true. You never cease to amaze me with ur work, even though you havent been here for that long. Ur a natural. Theres absolutely nothing wrong with this piece in my opinon. There was a lot of emotion and believe me, you have ALL of my respect. Ur great at writing and it seems like u've been doin this for a long azz time. All I can say is that you got me gurl. Keep up the awesome work. Keep droppin. Most Respect.
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well since I'm a dude I can't say I went through that..but I've been through shit too and I know how u feel...I'm not gonna critique this cuz this is ya heart..but I can say u had a good way of putting it together and having the emotion overflowing..keep it up yo..much love
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advice.
don't live your life for boys. thats society... why are you writing this shit? because you live with these idealistic hopes of love and life and sex, and this is forced on you from all angles. You'll be fine, it takes a bit of time to get over these things but I've seen it... It'll happen if you want it to. The first thing is you have to start relying on yourself and respecting yourself enough not to be getting involved with these guys...any guys for that matter. Take some time for yourself and don't hope for eternal love and trust so young. First live... if you try to love too early you'll be mad you didn't live later on. .peace.and.good.luck.
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Okay the reason I wrote this poem is because I did get hurt real bad by a guy... I didnt really honestly think about killing myself, but I felt like I was already dying. I was emotionally dying because I couldn't make myself happy anymore because I was just hurt so bad. This was just my way of getting those feelings out. Theres only a few guys in my life that I know would be worth my life, and that's only because I'd give mine to save theirs. I know they wouldn't hurt me... *thinks* Thanks for the idea for a new poem.
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Same here angel. Only a few are there, but they are worth everything. Keep up the great job.
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G0D DAMN!! =)
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Oh yeah.. thanks for the responses. They mean a lot to me. I appreciate them. ~RaPiDfIrE~ thanks hunnii <3 much love DthsMissingAngel; yo i respect you, ur shit is mad ill n your pieces are just.. so emotional. Iono, your shit is jus so good.. I appreciate you sayin all that ta me cuz it really meanz a lot knowin that someone else feels what i feel, knows what im sayin, and can relate to it. Ima hafta quote you n put that in my sig. Haha ![]()
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^ feel that lol
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No prob gurl. Keep ya great ass drops comin. Hit me up if ya need someone to talk to. Aim is dadyscrzycargurl. Ya kno wut ur doin and ur doin a kick ass job of it. Like I said, keep it comin. Most respect.
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I was kinda feeling this joint but suicide really just makes my skin crawl...The emotion was crystal clear and the pain was just soo deep, lovin it, 1luv.
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...uppin
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