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Divine pain
when will my losses yield my gain while now I lie beaten by the rain i still spit real shit, always livin my name sublime, worthy of awe and praise my only release from the daily malaise i possess a flow like the nile string multis for miles the words that i compile product of my livin trials will leave all in denial of skill-so-raw, yet- still-so infantile i am no evanescent my blessings are omnipresent yet i fight for my legend people can't understand my lessons they need tutorin My metaphors have them stressing wanna turn their computer in Yet and still i boast about how i burn mcs like toast about hwo i represent the east coast, buffalo i still try to establish my flow i still try to teach those who don't know im ready to stop but still i go the river of shit will always flow so i paddle, from open mics to battles leaving concious thought rattled and now i prattle on prolonging this poetic song i could flow all day long but that would be wrong so now i end pointless as i when i begin Last edited by Davinity : 11-14-03 at 06:33 PM. |
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i replied to Mbp the thign his girl wrote, i replied to that wordperfect joint, and that 13th disciple, regime collab
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Worthy of awe and praise Respect "..Very nice..Very emotional...real Deep piece..I really enjoyed reading this..there are few good writers on this site..and I think they are good cause simply they write some good shit..but..rarely I enjoy reading a piece..but..this was fantastic..peace.."
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nice drop man. cant say it was the shit, but nice, real nice.
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you could make the lines alittle longer and complex but i still liked the flow keep it up holla back
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IP: 6521 D40E
can i get some feedback
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Worthy of awe and praise Respect "..Very nice..Very emotional...real Deep piece..I really enjoyed reading this..there are few good writers on this site..and I think they are good cause simply they write some good shit..but..rarely I enjoy reading a piece..but..this was fantastic..peace.."
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dman im postin on my shit more than anybody else uppin.....
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Worthy of awe and praise Respect "..Very nice..Very emotional...real Deep piece..I really enjoyed reading this..there are few good writers on this site..and I think they are good cause simply they write some good shit..but..rarely I enjoy reading a piece..but..this was fantastic..peace.."
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mbp said it right but it doesnt mean this was less then hot just an easy way to touch it up it was still a dope read..you got style pressence i want to here you on audio
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ill try soem audio soon, i gotta get a new mic for my comp...if u have a chance, check out now or nothin...i personally think its the hottest open mic i have
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Worthy of awe and praise Respect "..Very nice..Very emotional...real Deep piece..I really enjoyed reading this..there are few good writers on this site..and I think they are good cause simply they write some good shit..but..rarely I enjoy reading a piece..but..this was fantastic..peace.."
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..Soft Focus..
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you shou,d re-wright this, i think you could do much better your structure was off and your vocab was basic, i think you are capable of greater potential do it again in'a couple days an get some more metas an shit spice it up people would like it more, it's good but you could do better i think
my 2 cents
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