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11-20-03, 03:12 PM | #1 | ||||||
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I'm a low life,
In a low life, That holds tight Right before the moment Set on rising like i'm potent But soon i've got to lay down Anxiety of whether im coping Impiety of the fade grounds Stays around Like plastic I found it drastic When I had to catch it Didn't even know what IT was Yet I thought I had tac-tics but didn't. . Only why I got a drip because I was Flipping pills looking like tic-tacs But just sits back As my lip drags Down to the ground I can't even stick fags Into my mouth As my eyes twist tags That stick out Like bones piercing the skin Girls appearing so slim While looking for a girl called Anna Cuz Anna-wrecked-this While hammered like nails My grammers reckless I stammer in the night frail Like broken threads Now i've a awoken dead Staring at my drunk night With slumps as my hype Plumped lights Seemed more fat than Rick Waller Reminisicing As I flipped my chipped dollars I'm them thats listening So speak up While i'm in this bleak rut Too keep plucked chickens To do as I was persisting Now Annas got this fairys wishings Hopefully now shes rarely stripping |
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11-20-03, 04:01 PM | #2 | |||||||
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this was a good read, i found your flow went on and off but it was still worded well with multies and metas good read and nice style of written keep it up pz
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11-21-03, 12:56 PM | #3 | ||||||
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11-26-03, 02:10 PM | #4 | ||||||
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Even though it was nice to read cuz after not seeing this piece or getting feedback for like a week or w/e. .I have found that new depth while writing, wording wise, flow wise, metaphorically, w/p, almost everything, but still drop feedback, I will reply to your, just name it
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