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a little somethin my girl worte me
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fukkaz (better) -handcuffs *Shit-Happens* -resticted Jay-R - The Mic Life Aight a little thing that my girl wrote me and i want feedback so holla you made me write this rap, so i guess here goes, but i'm not gonna promise that i'll have any flow. i miss you so much, from my head to my toes and how much a want you here, can't nobody know. i feel like a loser just to write this rap, just so you know, you got yourself in this trap. and you and i know it's just a peice of crap, but you love me too much to tell me that. it's crazy- how eighty-seven miles can make such a stupid situation that's so hard to take. sometimes i feel like i'm about to break but we're keepin it together for each other's sake. so i'm counting the days until i see you again, 14 days of busy, plus one for your friends. having you inside me is the only way to mend my broken heart, i miss you, and i fully intend to be your baby's mama for as long as you'll be my lover and my best friend-and some day i see us in love and so much older, we will finally be free. and i'm hopin that forever it will be you and me. drop you honest opinion thanks |
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come on^^^^^ its short just read it and drop a line or two, holla back
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why i am giving feedback to her and not to you is beyond me
by the way, i dont have beef with you anymore.. She had a decent flow, overall it was basic but not too bad Hope she gets better |
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thanks alot i'm cool too, thanks for bein honest i'm glad you were the bigger man cause i was bein kinda stuborn, anyways still UPPIN FO FEEDBACK
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come on^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^ ^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
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uppin come on holla back!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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it was aiight, but why you need to have our opinions? (Just a thought) If she's yo gurl an' all, you shouldn't care about whut other people think about it. Just as long as it holds something fo' you in yo' heart.
She obviously cares about you. Good luck wit that. Much respect |
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pretty good, she seemed kind of embaressed..from why am i rapping...hat line but it was good, basic but for a first nice try..pz man
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ok...number one u need to get off rb and go get ur girl.....anyway it was good, she decent, well...yeah decent....tell her she was aiight, and rapping could be a nice lil hobby for her...thas abotu it
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Worthy of awe and praise Respect "..Very nice..Very emotional...real Deep piece..I really enjoyed reading this..there are few good writers on this site..and I think they are good cause simply they write some good shit..but..rarely I enjoy reading a piece..but..this was fantastic..peace.."
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reciprocate the love, check words you can feel and nada by sublime d in open mic
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Worthy of awe and praise Respect "..Very nice..Very emotional...real Deep piece..I really enjoyed reading this..there are few good writers on this site..and I think they are good cause simply they write some good shit..but..rarely I enjoy reading a piece..but..this was fantastic..peace.."
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holla back come on................................................ .......................
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still uppin^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^come on read and post honestly its not that hard
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This is my first post!
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having you inside me is the only way to mend
judging by this did she want u to post this on the internet for people in thailand, england, and the nieghborhood bitch down the street who will dig up anything to bitch about to hear this? or is she just a slut and expects hoards of men to try and bone her while shes not looking. ^^not trying to diss ya girl but mabey she wanted privacy with her thoughts. Heads up shes better than half the herbs on here.
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yeah it was obvious she aint in2 flowin but since she admits it then i wont knock that part of the verse... def needs work BUT for a nonmcee it has a lil potential in it... the lyrics seemed like they were put down in a rush n unexpectedly but i guesss she gets an A for the overall effort.. not 2 mention... if shes a brand newbie in ths perfesion then hey... u gotta start somewhere.. practice makes perfect or at least the pure opposite as far most rappers in the game nowa days.1
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cool anymore^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^ ^^^^^^^^^^^uppin
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