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11-18-03, 07:28 PM
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...Thoughts of Dominance...
IP: 07E0 A9F2
I seen many things… that these visions bring
We aint in for bling… jus recognition within The site… respect… due for supreme dialect Flowing words… within any topic or concept From good to a bad situation… still get the effect Lyrics of a vet… true to the words… I left to inspect -On the monitor for viewing… to rep ma crew in Sight on the site… new visions are brewing Through literal mania and genius… I got stewing Like a medium steak…Raw… without need for chewin Collab’n together to open, ‘open’… to real viewing Respect to other crews… CV aint deluding its cueing With Real skill to evolve… put shame to other ‘s doin [Spoken] word from Deva… no confusin!… cos im language abusin! I aint grilling for beef … but prepare to start losin!!! Reppin the CV crew… bringing it to you Through thoughts of dominance… I don’t chew Or Bite…but I do…swallow whole… its true Fuck with me…start ticking… after a count to 2 Tick 1, tick 2… times up… there go ya brains I just blew Tick 5 meters on ma scorecard…that’s how far they flew Only challenge you give me?… what?… ill give you a clue Like a 3D jigsaw… but all red… no yellow to blue Answer… rebuilding ya head to you… when missing a few!!! That’s ma general approach… I aint a coach Wisdom in words… leave you lyrically poached You’ll crack wit my boiling… n that’s at ma lowest -At ma most... like a ghost…cant touch ma posts Injecting the site… a dose of ‘vision’… I host No jokes… pass most... To the rest come quite close Evokes times of good rhymes… like days by the coast Burning lines… run like the sun… leaving fakers roast I chose to ride this road… slowly shedding the load Rising like helium… like aluminium… aint gonna corrode Jus shine brighter… gettin tighter…break’n the code Igniter' passion to ladies… with my manipulative mode I aint owed… aim for respect… without it being throw’d!!! |
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11-18-03, 07:29 PM
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IP: 5AF5 5CA5
heres the replies i did.....
meta 5 - an audio verse gene pool - 7 years past eleete - influence sorry bout that...... |
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11-19-03, 03:54 AM
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IP: 5AF5 5CA5
can i get some feed thrown here.......thanx............
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11-19-03, 07:26 AM
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IP: DF7B C8F7
i like the way uv used different word vocab to make the rhymes dope. il av 2 try doin the same sorta thing to try elevate.
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11-19-03, 02:10 PM
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IP: 4809 165C
yo ill be honest wit da feed back....this piece was aight i really wasnt feeling da lines much cuz some of them had me alil bored da other problem wit this piece is da lack of creativity in da rhyme skeam i know u tried to rhyme each word but it barely made sense as to why u would use some of da words u did like this for example....
example of useless words wit no meaning and no neat flow: "Evokes times of good rhymes… like days by the coast Burning lines… run like the sun… leaving fakers roast" it didnt seem to have a nice flow and da line kinda boogles me unless thats what u was looking for...u start off strong but towards da end u seem to have gotten bored at what u was writting cuz it started to fall off a lil heres an example... you started wit: "I seen many things… that these visions bring We aint in for bling… jus recognition within The site… respect… due for supreme dialect...." and ended wit: "Rising like helium… like aluminium… aint gonna corrode Jus shine brighter… gettin tighter…break’n the code Igniter' passion to ladies… with my manipulative mode I aint owed… aim for respect… without it being throw’d!!!" like i said u started to get unfocused cuz da creativity never came through to da end so overall this piece is aight da lines were a lil weak da metaphors seemed a lil off and there was barely a nice and neat flow through out da whole thing so if u work on those skills it will sound a lot better other than that nice try...... |
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