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Corrupted Visions: In Too Deep. . *Dope*
IP: E38C 4580
Door slamming is heard. A Voice says Lay Down, Your Next Visit Is In Two Days Springs from a bed is heard.
Fuck Man. . . I Was In Too Deep. . . . My Rights Revoked, Shit Causes Me To Sigh And Choke I Lied About Coke, Cause I Don't Wanna Die Or Be Broke Tryin This Smoke, Gettin By On A Hundred Every Few Days News Say, The Brusies Of A Life Bout To End In A Cool Way These Chains On My Feet, Allow Me To Be, Nuthin More Than A Worker Wife With A Kid On The Way, Keep The Pain At Bay, Try Not Ta Hurt Her Hard To Survive, Red In Parts Of My Eye, High Can't Subside I Try Ta Provide, Enough Paper To Find Wifey Food For My Seed Mood Movin With Deeds, Rocks On The Block Cause I Need The Green, I Strive For N Ride More, To Deal This Shit Quick Parents Sayin I Got No Dick, But I'm Bustin My Ass For A Fix Caught In The Mix, Bought Every Fuckin Thing I Could Sell Good, So When My Son Is Born We Outta Tha Hood Paid For Protection, So I Carry Heat To Leave Beef In Stretchers But I Just Want Perfection, Life And Order Need Connection Don't Need This Stress N, Cops Is Runnin Checks N Leavin Me Guessin [Chorus] Tryna Make A Livin But Peoples Is Givin Me Shit Sinnin With Bricks, I'm Jus Tryna Get Me Some Chips I'm Working Fucking Hard, Strugglin To Make Ends Meet Make Wins Peak, But Sins Creep, Am I In Too Deep? It's Like God Had It Out For Me, Done Had A Bout With Disease I'm Beggin Please As I Smoke These Trees And Fall On Knees End This Sufferin', Get Me Somethin, Don't Leave Me With Nothin' Don't Lead Me With Bluffin, Really I Don't Need Any Frontin Believe Me Cousin, I'm Buzzin' With My Life Lookin At Labor Family Callin' Me A Traitor, Sayin' I'm A Fuckin Drug Blazer With Emotions Goin Up N Down Like Elevators. . . I'm Needin This Non-Sense To Stop I Got Sense To Pop Shit If My Mu'Fuckin Money Flops Then My Honey Drops, Sweat Beads Runnin Down Her Head God Tests G's I See, I'm Restless As Wifey Lay Up In The Bed My Pockets Full Of Dough, I Can Buy That Crib Buy The Toys For My Kid, And Provide A Nice Life To Live Baby Bought To Come Out, Cops Runnin' In With Guns Out My Son's Out, Wife Cryin As Cuffs Like My Hands Now Hands Down, They Busted Me For Hustlin' Weed On The Street These Mu'Fuckas Only See Green And Don't Realize. . I Was Jus Tryna Get What I Need [Chorus] Now I'm Lookin At My Wife N Son Behind A Stained Glass The Pain Lasts, Forever And A Day, Cryin With Chains On My Ass I Put My Hand Up But Can't Touch, Only See A Tear In My Baby's Eye Daddy Why? It's Drivin Me Crazy To See My Lady Try To Hold It Together, I Tell Her This Is Jus Some Bad Weather Tell my Son, Pops Is Clever N I Won't Be Locked Up Forever My Time Is Up, I Blow A Kiss, Reminice Then Hit My Cell Think To Myself, I Got Enough Stashed To Get My Ass Out On Bail But Oh Girl Ain't Tell, She Spent That Money Cause She Was Hungry So I'ma Stuck G, Locked Down With Cops Now, I Pray Every Sunday Get Me Outta This Shit, It's A Fuckin Crime To Wanna Provde For My People? I'm Writin Rhymes Equal To Kineval, Words Lethal, My Lifes Evil Devil's Over Took Me, No Longer A Rookie, I See What I Need To Tell Wifey I Need To See You, Cause My Heart Hurts So Much-- That One Touch Will Cause It To Bleed Through Mom N Dad Have Fully Turned Their Backs So It's Support I Lack. . I Think That This Is The Fact, God Put Me On My Back Cause I Was In Too Deep Damn. . . -Formula Last edited by Formula : 11-26-03 at 11:59 PM. |
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IP: E38C 4580
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LM (Feat. Double-O Seven)- Hate Comes To You Auspicious- Forever Defend- Want To Be Free I Kno This Shit Is Long. . But Fuck, It's Standard. 3 Verses, 16 Lines A Piece. Read It. . Review It. . W/E You want. -Formula. |
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IP: 399E F0FD
Ey dat was some real deep shit. I liked everything about it. The chorus and all. I wish more people drop shit like dis
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IP: 792C 0F72
that was a deep piece....it was a good Read....i'll give ya 8/10 for it
Aiight Peace Out Kuz |
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IP: CADA 5749
Yo This Was HOTT!!!!... You got a Deep Mind about you....
Stay Up ,,,, check this one out http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=94738 |
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IP: 5F2A E1C0
This Was A Very Good Piece Here.. The Multis In It
Were Well Planned With The Flow And Structure Mix. The Story Was On Point With Your Lyrics. Good Story Line Also. The Flow Was To The Point Where It Worked And Didn't Lose The Reader Cuz You Were Tryin To Hard, So That Was Dope.. Overall This Was A Good Piece Bro.. Just Keep Steppin Everything Up |
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IP: 340D 8B8F
Yeah i agree this was a good piece man....You structured this very nicely....I liked your multies, they were all over in the piece, i liked that lol...flow was real nice in this like most of your pieces are, stayed on point, didnt get off....Overall this was a good piece, made a good read..Keep at it and keep dropping.
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IP: E38C 4580
Word Up, Thanks For The Feed So Far, Really Appreciate It. And Masta. . When I Write My Tracks N Shit, Flow Is What I'm Concerned About The Most. . That's Why They All Maintain The Flow Throughout Even If The Rest Of The Piece Sucks.
-Formula. |
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