excuse the caps(an old post)


MY INNER DIMENSIONS ARE NOT THOSE OF CONVENTIONAL PERCEPTIONS
AND MY WORLDY CONCEPTION WAS A DECEPTION BY THE DEVIL THAT I WASNT IN GODS PROTECTION
I MADE THE CORRECTION WHILE PERFORMING A SELF INSPECTION SO THAT MY SOUL HAD DIRECTION
AND SINCE THE LORD'S PERFECTION GRANTS ME HIS AFFECTION I CHERISH HIS HOLY SELECTION
BETTER YET HIS SPIRIT COLLECTION BECAUSE HE WILL RETURN AGAIN
FOR THOSE DILUTED WITH SIN LIVING SOLELY FOR THERE SKIN I PRAY THAT YOU MAKE AMENDS
I PRAY THAT YOUR MIND TRANSCENDS PAST THE INTENDS OF MAKING DIVIDENDS
I PRAY THAT YOUR HEART DEPENDS ON THE FATHER, AND THE HOLY SPIRIT AS FRIENDS
I PRAY THAT IN YOUR MOST ANNOYING MOMENT YOU CALL THINGS THAT BE NOT AS THOUGH THEY WERE
OFCOURSE LUCIFER WILL DETER, LET NOT YOUR THOUGHTS DEFER FOR HES NOT THE DEVIL IF THAT DIDNT OCCUR

This was pretty good. I liked the topic. It had variety. I'm not oo cool about the first few phrases. They were a little off. Try using simpler rhymes for the begginning two sentences. Also, maybe you could be a little more self-explanitory. Did something happen to you to make you think this way? Maybe you could tell a story or something. Use graphic rhymes.