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Old 11-19-03, 10:56 PM   #1
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How Its Over

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Please please don’t test me, I am no killer/
Please please I’m going on a rampage like Godzilla//
My bullets will shoot right through ur soul/
Ill salute your death by hanging you from a flag pole//
Im right on that edge/
Please Please someone push this cat off the ledge//
Ha, this stuff is straight dirty/
Kind of like you, maybe you shouldn’t have been so flirty//
Some of my crew calls me insane/
Let me know, am I fucking with your brain?//
I’ll always put on my kind of flare/
I chop up your limbs, make you choke on a pair//
Its all humor till it happens to your being/
You wont be being, nothing will you be seeing//
What does that mean? You’ll scream/
Arrest me now!, call in the SWAT team//
You never read a description so vivid/
I’m furious now, you made this emcee livid//
I tried being nice..ahh maybe twice/
That’s cold. Like your body frozen in ice//
I’ll use your cubes in my coke a cola/
Ill send you off a bridge..in a Toyota Carolla//
I hope you can derive something from nothing.
I hope your listening to these rhymes/
I tried warning you.. Zero times//
Im wicked, you just had to know/
Why I kept trying to suffocate you in the snow//
In your coffin, I might hide a bee hive/
So they can sting you, making sure your not alive//


I couldn’t leave the game, it’s a shame/
Our relationship.. I had to maim//
But its all the same.
I rock her, you rock me, I see/
Whats going on, its all on me//
I know what you be thinking/
Keep blinking, it’s a dream your linking//
It up to, Its all lies/
But it will eventually lead to our demise//
Im wise, these words break our ties/
The ones we had based on all lies//
I played you, you won the match/
We clashed, you broke our latch//
Its over, don’t try to makeup/
Our foundation and coverup, our breakup//
It happened, let everyone know/
I SAID LET EVERYONE KNOW!
Your not intelligent, my words are negligent//
You cant read between my lines/
Rhymes, mean something more than our lives//
Gold mines, see something shining, look behinds//
Its tough, no doubt first week kind of rough/
But it appears you had enough, of this stuff//
That’s what its called, its what it is, are you appauled?/
My lyrics have left you mauled, In your room crying.
I know you balled//
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Old 11-20-03, 10:30 AM   #2
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This was easy to read. Good flow good elevation. This almost seems like it could be a poem or something. God some good skills in that area. Maybe you should come up with a better ending. At the end of every song, there should be the best punch ever. Work on that.
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Old 11-20-03, 11:44 AM   #3
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Hey, can you post up who you replied to?
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Thanks Man.
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Old 11-20-03, 12:29 PM   #4
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i wasn't really feelin this much, didnt like the structure, it seemed a bit forced, but it wasnt bad, i just didnt like it........too basic..aight...Pc
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Old 11-20-03, 03:16 PM   #5
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Thanks for the comments. Sorry about the not posting thing. Thanks
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Old 11-20-03, 05:49 PM   #6
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Loco, Withersman, Lulong
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