replied to: snake-eyes, Young P, and obsenity


aight it aint finished YET but yeah its comin soon.. maybe lookin for a collabo.... holla at me 1 (this is about how people rap about money and cars and.. bling bling.... lol yeah but here it is)

1.yer a joke im a con artist/
in this rap shit to see who will rhyme hardest/
bomardin these mother fucks with each part of a sharp rhyme/
left a mark this time cuz your hearts mine/
im purely about rap cuz my cars-don't-shine/
you aint about money? Well then bars-don't-rhyme/
yall went to far-this-time shouldn't we have stopped after bling bling cars and shyne?/

Hook: as i lurk up on this rap game/ you got crap for a name/ lackin massive action in the back of your brain/ imagine pure rappin it wont happen cuz you did it in vain/ spittin insane mutha fuckas kiddin? youre a minute too late/

lol, yo man, i feel you dog, you on the same page with me. man, you flow like water. The momentem of your flow is straight forward and relevant. keep it up dog and be real.

I DISAGREE HIS STYLE DIDNT EMPHISIZE THE SUBJECT REALLY TO WELL SOME MINOR COMMENTS NOTHING HAD A STRONG ENOUGH STRUCTURE......IT AINT GARBAGE BUT IT ISNT THAT WELL COMPOSED EITHER.

but what you dont understand is.. i aint done yet.. i got some editing and etc. to do.. finishin it will come soon so yeah.. 1

ayo people please dont sleep on this i know it aint much but yeah its comin soon i need a little feedback on this so far... peace

Listen To Aesop Rock - Save Yourself

wtf is that sposed to mean? whoa.. yer avy is trippy as f*uck.. ...... but seriously.. wtf? lol still needin more feedback
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u dont need more feedback..there's nothin to rate here, u want people to be liek u got mad potential this shit coudl realyl go soemwhere, please....give us a lil more, im prolyl one of thmosst leniet critiquers here...bbut seriously..what u got is hot...gimme more, its nto even half a verse...get to work...u shoulda waited on thsi one

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