Pacaso Mac the Street Avenger

dog, i'm a known veteran], the streets disciple teacher, vital preacher/
none known better than] i'm also i rifle reacher, i'll show ya my survival features/
plus i don't choke] when i'm under the pressure/
i don't joke] when i say i keep teks under the dresser/
but this game is not all about guns, rifles, heat and clips reloaders/
if this was ball i'd be like the son of micheal, the streets tryin to tip me over/

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MAC4LIFE, M.multis A.authority C.commitment,MFL
Pacaso mac the Baskin Robbins Street(hustla tryin to scoop up this ice and cream)

i like it tight even though it was short i really hope u can write more to it cuz it was nice so far it flowed nicely and good street verse had a hint of street poetry in it and i felt da simple street vibe too

da illest line in this piece:
"if this was ball i'd be like the son of micheal, the streets tryin to tip me over/"

this was alright...i didnt really like the bar stretches though i felt it had some good words but you could have made this more advanced pz

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Open Mics
The Weathers Art
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=108673
My Teenage Eyes
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...threadid=104850
Secluded
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...851#post1148851
Open Your Eyes
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...461#post1157461

feelin the verse.....havin a little trouble catchin the depth to it, but it sounds tight, good flow and multis in there. flows nicely......street essence to it like M said. really feelin the last 2 lines. i like the statement and closer was clever and cool, talkin bout your struggle and shit. if u ever decide to make it longer i would say to elaborate a bit and go into a little more depth into what ever subject you were thinkin about.

thanks...

thanks for the compliments and shit and i will take ya'll advice into consideration, i don't just get mad when mofuckers trying to help me out thanks ya'll

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MAC4LIFE, M.multis A.authority C.commitment,MFL
Pacaso mac the Baskin Robbins Street(hustla tryin to scoop up this ice and cream)