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11-23-03, 12:18 AM
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*Just Try And Stop Me*
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*Truth can Hurt*
IP: 62DC 5E65
song truth is hard 2 recover/
truth is i wanna be ur lover/ pain consists of watching u sorrow/ never must u ask will i be there 4 u tomorrow/ How can it be,man can control your life and u juss walk right by me watever u want that i will give, all i want is 4 u 2 have a betta life 2 live u cry and still u go-back, i luv ya gurl...if only u would know-that pain is hard 2 live-to, care and lovin is everything ill give-u im not sayin leave ur man, unless ur sure 2 take my hand with or without me, ill be there, 2 love and charish ur care simple is but problems happen, this between me & u no audience clappin he lives 2 forget, if i luv but cant have i still wouldnt regret we met shit happens but secrets R kept, the way i wish i was therew wen u slept wat can i do 2 give you it-all, i care 4 u but wat if it turns 2 love i fall ur beautiful dont say your-not,like ur man says he'll call but shit once again he forgot sick 2 my stomach the way he make you cry,why cant i have u by my side what did i do 2 deserve to watch u get treated bad by this man wit wat nerve i know u see it, u say ur strong and better then this..so plz be-it instant connection between 2 of us, but still our lives seem farther distant we play around noth 2 bad,how mad i get wen all he can do is get u-mad we never rly met,we juss click'd,ur special gurl u juss cant be pick'd ur an angel juss have 2 spread thos wings,come wit me and 4get all thoze bad things chorus* its the truth i hate 2 tell ur an angel livin in his hell i come 2 rescue u from harms way plz be mine.. no lie will come from wat i have 2 say we can laugh bout this and joke-2,how can i mend my heart wen urs is broke-2 u come b4 me anytime day or night,u can come 2 me from ur relationships fight we cant be one,but im done listen'n 2 this boy play wit ur emotions likes its fun theres nothin i can do but be me, u talk 2 me and look 2..but gurl 2 ur rlly see-me 4 ever tear u cry,cuz of him, its like demons juss tare my insides ur the very thing that brightinz my smile, u kno im right stop fightin denile yet i do not speak of us,how my world would crush if there was nothin between-us/ im i tear at keyin,u kno me and u fit..so wats there fear-of-bein/ hes makin somethin ur better then,u say men r all the same..well i aint like other men/ face 2 face wit u hard 2 brace my knees at the site at u, me and him have a race 2 race 4 u nothin will stop me this time, i wont take u, theres better wayz 2 make u mine/ i dont feel this way all the-time,if my eyes u and luv only way i find time 2 rhyme/ cursed i am, but u make me feel good..and 4 u hot damn/ seriously the truth is u luv him yes,but wats he good 4 leavin u a mess/ how many weekends must i hear, ya he called me and piss'd me of,and i heard the hurt clear/ it hurts 2 write this wit fear of doin wrong,ur the truth in my life and this song/ dont kno how i could replace-him,but i do kno that is sad u cry evertime u face-him/ 4get it..do wat ur heart revieles,u'll no ur right by how ur hearts feels/ chorus* truth is certain and never wrong/ i probably is am i hurtin somebody in this song/ im sry and i promise its 4 ur the best/ he can mess ur life, me ill take the love and all the rest/
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11-23-03, 12:35 AM
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Banned: Cheating
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IP: 4577 CD9A
nice shit
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11-23-03, 01:36 PM
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IP: D6F6 355A
Ight thanx 4 the in depth feedback lol...
w/e uppin 4 some more feedback come on y'all lets see it
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11-23-03, 01:51 PM
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IP: 19AF 50C1
emotional strength graphic realistic and a touch poetic over all an ill drop twin do your thang keep postin and ill keep reading
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11-23-03, 06:13 PM
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*Just Try And Stop Me*
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IP: 62DC 5E65
^^thanx man ..very much appreciated...
thanx 4 ur say... uppin 4 some more feed..... lets see it guyz... peep it
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11-23-03, 06:53 PM
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*Just Try And Stop Me*
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IP: D6F6 355A
O...THE 3 PPLZ OPEN MICS I HIT WHERE
MASTA C HIGH CLASS FGEE PEAC EE
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11-23-03, 07:12 PM
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IP: B47A 7630
Very nice read.
I havent been on here for a while, and this was the first i read when i came back, and it shows me that we dont always have herbs on this site. Very nice vocab, did well and flow was original, i liked it...mixed it up a few times, still good Long, but nice topic way to stay on it that long... overall-9/10 |
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11-23-03, 07:46 PM
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IP: D6F6 355A
thanx man...glad i could show u something ..lol
thanx 4 the feed...much appreciated... keep it good man....
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11-23-03, 11:23 PM
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IP: 2A4D CF45
yeah i liked the structure and flow of this piece, it was long but you stayed
on topic throughout and also the poetic style of this was dope...... keep it up... 9/10 |
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11-24-03, 01:49 AM
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IP: D95F 8163
yeah this was good man....the flow was pretty good i thought, feel off at a few spots but other than it was real well....you structured it pretty good, the only thing was some of the lines were kinda long but it was still good i thought....your vocab was pretty as well....overall this was a good piece...keep at it and keep dropping.
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