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Old 11-22-03, 10:45 PM   #1
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keystyled...leave a link

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yo

yo yo yo

i feel life is not real just a thrill or however we take it
were lead by a plan however we're sposed to make it
wit the world goin around so fast it spins your spirit
miscalculations of character so this feelin u start to fear it
dont wanna be near it but its like cops they're always there
roll around wit nappy hair smokin n fuckin like i dont care
and god i wanna let it out but somebody might gotta die
the grease of the worlds greed is bad but im a hotta fry
im bad for the will of men equiped wit supernatural powers
darken the sky make it rain blood spittin my factual showers
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Old 11-23-03, 12:36 AM   #2
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yo that was ight but u need to work on punches
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Old 11-23-03, 12:51 AM   #3
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You forgot the 3 names or 3 links you left feedback on, post them here or this will get deleted...

But this was alright for a keystyle i thought....flow was pretty good, got off at a few points but still decent...your vocab was decent in this...you strucured it pretty nice i thought too....Try using some more multies and internals thought but it was still good....overall this was alright...keep at it and keep dropping.
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Old 11-23-03, 10:51 AM   #4
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it was iight, but short, but for a keystyle is a hot shit, keep it
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Old 11-23-03, 10:57 AM   #5
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use more multis and a higher vocab, ..keep spittin and droppin and try to punch hard and original..
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