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Old 11-20-03, 12:32 PM   #1
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Corrupted Visions: And there another one goes

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http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...1332#post921332
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...1343#post921343
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...1349#post921349

Be it me or you or both 2
Neither can overpower addictions glue
Once hooked ya cooked.. a brain-cell stew
-and Through time.. the resistance weakens
The grip tightens.. and ‘Grim’ starts ‘Reaping’
-Creeping through like a silenced gun
Ya cant run.. loaded with the route you chose
RIP.. And there another one goes…….…..
Life is for living.. rebuilding not killing
Peace aint a word for gravestones (rip)
It atones to positive thinkin and willing
-Its weak using metal.. should me mental
-to settle, using brains not brawn
in communities torn to embrace your foes
binding brothers, but progress is slow
1 step forward 2 steps back
RIP.. And there another one goes………....
Its always the same.. but we’re all to blame
In our own way
through wanting fame, or playing the game
cos its the frame of human evolution
primal urges stemming from retribution
from when survival of the fittest arose
RIP.. And there another one goes……Yes! Another one goes!
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Old 11-20-03, 01:26 PM   #2
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nice shit homie keep droppin niceness mayne
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Old 11-20-03, 05:25 PM   #3
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dont sleep on it.............................peace
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Old 11-21-03, 12:10 AM   #4
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Yeah i agree this was a good piece....good read as well....the flow was pretty good i thought, stayed on point most of the time.....Your vocab was nice as well....good conept and content i thought....structure was alright.....Overall this was a good piece...Keep at it and keep dropping.
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Old 11-21-03, 06:26 PM   #5
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nice verse, got a little good hook in there. tight shit.
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Old 11-21-03, 06:33 PM   #6
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that was real tight. the choice of words was good, allthough you lost me on
Its weak using metal.. should me mental
-to settle, using brains not brawn
the end was real good too
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Old 11-22-03, 02:55 AM   #7
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nice eh kinda simple vocab at begining then starts going
ok flow stayed on point
maybe lengthen ure bars a little more
like the multies cuz u didnt over do them like most
good shit

hit up my shit in my sig dog
peace
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Old 11-22-03, 07:45 PM   #8
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thnx dawgs.......appreciated!.....Pz
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Old 11-23-03, 01:09 PM   #9
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A GOOD READ AND A DISPLAY OF YOUR REAL TALENT BUT I STILL FEEL YOUR HOLDING BACK THAT UPSETS ME BUT I CAN UNDERSTAND DO A PEACE WHERE YOU JUST LET GO AND VENT I THINK YOU WILL SHINE BETTER.
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Old 11-23-03, 01:22 PM   #10
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thnx word, im startin one now, ill let it all out, im just starting on a few beers.... then....lettin it rip.......thnx again....oh and a seen your was gettin slept so....i just had to leave my opinion..which i do anyways....Pz..........
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Old 11-23-03, 01:42 PM   #11
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erace your pm box yo
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