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Old 11-15-03, 01:06 PM   #1
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one day

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have u ever got caught with an ounce in ur bag?
the police u faught were just too damn mad
spent a nite in a cell, shared it wiv a man called mel
he said 'please dnt tell, im gonna make u see hell'
so u scream ' FUCK I DONT SWING THAT WAY'
he thinks ur lean, converts u to the church of gay
luckily, before the baptisms over, the guard goes and taps ur shoulder.
he says ' ur free to go sir, u nearly got crushed by mel the boulder.'
its quater past 10, ur feelin hungry, u see a burger in a bin
what the hell, but the buns all crunchy, the preacher says thats a sin.
u get taken 2 church wiv some holy water. stupid boy u make a pass at the preachers daughter.
fools like you could never court her. avoid men like u is what muma taught her.
horny as a bull, u go ito a public toilet for a pull.(yaa)
unaware ur bein watched FOOL! tramps lookin ova abt to drool.
that aint rite u got some spit on ur head, uve never shed ur load that high.
so u look up, the tramps hair is red. u sprint out the door before he makes u die.
ur pants are wet. ur dick was hard lead, now its like soft bread.
people are scared. an old woman fainted. SHIT SHE'S DEAD!
wats the rush, across the road, hoes are lookin lush.
u dont step much, cos u get hit by a bus, (ow my baks crushed!)
this day was a curse, ur bein stretchered away in a helicopter
things cant get much worse, but no, gay mel's gonna be ur docter...


sorry i jus got bored and made up a perverted story that rhymed.
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Old 11-15-03, 01:11 PM   #2
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BASIC FUNNY AND YET STYLISH I THINK THIS WAS A SOLID DROP SOME MINOR TOUCHES AND THIS WILL BLAZE
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Old 11-15-03, 04:45 PM   #3
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Funny shit........................
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Old 11-16-03, 01:57 PM   #4
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thanx 4 the comments and hints, amazing what a bit of boredom and imagination will do... fuck all.
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Old 11-16-03, 01:58 PM   #5
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nah that shit was tyte
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Old 11-27-03, 12:31 PM   #6
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hott
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Old 11-27-03, 01:01 PM   #7
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yeah i thought this was pretty tight...nicely structured...a couple of times the flow fell but, thats nuthin, thought it was funny shit.....nice look at it........keep on it....Pz.......
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Old 11-27-03, 04:41 PM   #8
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Yeah i agree this was pretty good....just watch some of the lines length though some of them got a little too long you should try to keep them around the same lenght though to help out the structure and it helps it flow better....but other than that it was a pretty good drop...keep at it.
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