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11-25-03, 02:26 PM
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[!Heaven To Hell!]-First Verse
IP: 81D2 416D
[Talking]
You ever feel lost..dunoo if theres a heaven or hell..dunoo were you going..and you dont know what you want...and you wonder why god dont answer when you pray..........LISTEN!! tensions is out!..did i mention to tell i've been threw heaven and hell... seven is swell...hit a section of cells..and you become eleven and fell... fear is off does he hear it not..cause he never helps when you swear to god!... like his care is off..so we look to the devil for the tear is cought!... if theres a heaven why aint there a cure for cancer?!.. so you still pray and pray but the devils the one that answers... frights frown!...you people dunno what to live for..until the nights down... i lose my sight how?!..but its alright now..cause i'll be in the white clouds?!!... or now im face to face with coals urns..and just watch as my soul burns... goin threw my past and all the old turns...staring and missing the times sold hurt!... grab your girl clutch and think...heaven to hell..is there even such a thing?!?!?!... all you do is wish and dream...duck the seams...god dont even kno what the fuck i mean... we drop..grove..waiting just try...you kno god should stay in your eyes... see god truth..satan must lie...stop..MOVE!...breakin JUST CRY!... bigger the hat bigger the man...stop shittin me you bastards...god isnt givin the pastors... hitting the raptors..fighting to live..with the struggles you still call him mister and master... we all on are flight to hell and im in the cock pit...satans walls im locked in.. DEATH..if gods god why cant he stop it..who knows 10 years i could be a prophet... |
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11-25-03, 02:28 PM
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IP: 81D2 416D
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11-25-03, 04:07 PM
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IP: B910 8CBB
nice shit dogg
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11-25-03, 07:21 PM
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IP: 81D2 416D
madd wfeed wtf uppin
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11-27-03, 10:24 AM
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IP: 81D2 416D
fuckin sleepin bitches drop feed u dushbags
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11-27-03, 03:42 PM
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IP: 340D 8B8F
Yeah this was pretty nice man....Your structure was pretty good, just watch some of the lines length though they were kinda long....the flow to this was good i thought got off at some spots but overall it was good....Vocab in this was pretty decent....ovearll id say this was a good piece, made a good read...keep at it and keep dropping.
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