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12-06-03, 12:18 PM | #1 | ||||||
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I hold my breath for something new
I ain't coming through Yet i'm purple I feel like i'm going around in Circles Found to Merk all Solutions like Mud Everytime I eat the same white Grub I give my timmy that same Light Rub B'cos it don't feel like i've eaten After One-Weak I thought I was foreign B'cos I Weak-Uned.. Then its More' dim Every morning I was. . gently mourning I found it so scourning. . I wanted to be a Hobo Just so I could get change Treked the same terrains Again & Again.. Then I remain..With the Same Old With my Game Cold Every Snowflake seems the same I thought I Flipped my status But the OldSame Gleems my Game I'm Lost.. My LandLord wouldn't change my Lease If I had one.. Just so I couldn't be Differ-Rent to peeps I sadden.. Like discrimination of Asians in Chruch Theres no Alter-Asian..I'm feeling hurt. After I was wandering around I was stumbling.. Yet unfound But.. I'm pledging.. Maybe I'm a Ledge-End Because I left this on a CliffHanger Did he ever manage to LiftLanger!? http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?s=&threadid=96778 http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthr...6315#post966315 http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthr...6325#post966325 |
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12-06-03, 12:53 PM | #2 | ||||
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YO this flowed very nice man , ..i was feeling some parts of ur verse very nice..some lines made me think twice, ..personal aspects in it, ..made it even more interesting, ..
My LandLord wouldn't change my Lease If I had one.. Just so I couldn't be Differ-Rent to peeps I sadden.. Like discrimination of Asians in Chruch Theres no Alter-Asian..I'm feeling hurt. Liked these lines , ..vocab fitted the concept..structure was nice, ....real nice read = ) ..
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12-07-03, 05:58 AM | #3 | ||||||
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Ty Bud..
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12-07-03, 10:43 AM | #4 | ||||
Eddy.
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Up^
This dsnt deserve to be slept on
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12-07-03, 10:59 AM | #5 | |||||||
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this had a very different flow. It took me a while to get the jist of the style but then I got it. I like the symbolic uses of words like alterations=alter-asians.
very nice 8/10 |
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