I'll jump into costume/
impromptu/
just to rob you/
Put the nozzle/
to ya' eyeball and tell you what not to do/
Rip your tonsils/
out thru ya' nostrils/
Bury you next to shark fossils/
make it impossible/
to find you/
Depths tha Jacque Cousteau himself wouldn't dare to dive to/
With goggles/
oxygen bottles/
and Doppler effect modules/

Lock you in a time capsule and smash the console/
Shit on you in reverse suck you in a brown hole/
Suck the power outta' ya' soul/
Ya' nuthin but a coward in a cold/
freez-n with an hour to go/
Watchin' my casio stopwatch countin it slow/
Like drug lords checkin to see if it's talcum or coke/
I could kill you by drownin the globe/
Or I could just spit inside of a hole/
and put an ounce in ya' throat/
In battles I'm a thousand and oh/
I silenced the Pope/
Do you know how many rhymes I've economically grossed/
No?/
I thought so/

Neither do I/
There's a dick between ya' mothers thighs/
divided by PIE/

I'm the sickest/
linguistically illicit/
lyrical misfit in the business/
And possibly in existence/
what's your consensus?/
Studied my own syntax statistics/
since '96 wit/
CPA certified assistants/
I've made the decision that my standards are above precision/
The only thing I could honestly say I love more than women are dope writtens/
If it ain't dope then don't spit it/
Don't be sensitive and get on the defensive just practice ya' penmanship/
If you can't spit at high temperatures then just quit/

feedback if any dont sleep on this shit

some nice vocab but was weakened by the structure, ya flow was knocked aswell.....smoothe this out and i think you could be quite good.....get on it.....ill keep my eyes open...aight...pZ

You need to leave 3 links or 3 names of pieces you left feedback to or this will get deleted...

But like deva said your vocab was nice in this...but structure needs work, try making the short lines longer and make them the same length so it is structured good, flow was ok but it was off cause of the structure...just fix it up and it should be good...keep at it.

I'm with them. The vocab was good but the structure was off and that threw the flow off. I like the freestyle. It caught my attention pretty good just improve the structure. Keep droppin.

you need to reply to three other open mics, and then post links to youre replies in this thread, or it gets deleted.
thanks.

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