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01-16-04, 01:12 AM | #1 | |||
..I Know Kung Fu..
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10 Bars-Wires
IP: 1481 46A3
Intertwining wires herd through words and emerge right next to me
Moving westwardly in thirds.. rhyming inert verbs to surge in threes Electricity sparks in high marks and goes down deeply like dive sharks With steeply placed casings which feed off outlets or otherwise starve Carving ingraved using tactics that cause an uprise like its hair static Winding wisdom with wires into puzzles which creates lines enigmatic Practice efficently when mind's right through chords connecting cables While I discontinue burnt out bulbs that were nothing more than playable Flowing currents stabling volts into time which haults into lightyear bolts Speeding with tha torque of countless colts.. making this life image fold Holding any charge at all.. with atoms clashing together then light spreads But merely abandoned lines.. mostly fall after time.. killing any hopes dead Seeing how things work under brought upon situations.. or even just tests Seeping through crests.. drying flat.. but naturally seems all but pressed Kanye west knows best.. but different kind of expression.. and impression Different message.. tha rock fell and now he wears a chain of acceptance Soon enough it clumps in mounds.. and chords circle around in clouds From tha ground up.. holding any power extremely live yet in ways is aloud Where tha modem is tha sire.. traveling through grooves or treaded tires A virtual world.. building an empire.. connections made from internet wires ...keyed |
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01-17-04, 02:51 AM | #2 | |||
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IP: 1481 46A3
I liked It......lol
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01-17-04, 07:19 AM | #3 | |||||||
1E
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IP: DF7B C8F7
quite an original topic.... ya used some nice voacb and a good amount of syllables for a good flow, but in places it fell, and some of the rhyme transition could be smoother.... but some nice wordplay and worded well.......
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01-17-04, 08:40 AM | #4 | |||||||
New to RB
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IP: C400 C802
yea...
you cant reallyy put it much better than how ^he^ said it... nice key man... |
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01-18-04, 02:02 AM | #5 | |||
..I Know Kung Fu..
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IP: 1481 46A3
Thanks everybody.... anymore feedback??
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01-21-04, 06:17 PM | #6 | |||||||
Banned
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IP: 08A2 8655
dude. ur long messages dont impress me .. but know what will. seeing u beat me because that will show that u dont type gibberish whenever u speak .. or suck dick ..
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01-21-04, 07:07 PM | #7 | |||||||
Banned
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IP: CC27 D3DF
u AINT GOT NOTHIN ON ME man
if u think u do battle me |
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