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Be easy. . I haven't written since I got banned. .
Wrapped within a world of false pretence and innocence. . But in a sense, we guess we can get by on what we're given. . Who to trust? Who not to? Never give up . . But we've got to. . Everday we wonder where we'll be 10 years from now and how we'll have progressed. . But nothing lasts and 10 years pass. . And we're back out here on our ass. . Some days we lie and reminisce on the genesis. . And it goes like this. . Born in september, just near the crack of autumn. . Who knew that you woulda slipped into the cracks of time and forgot him. . He's the person you love to hate, always drunk in public and irate. . Perhaps once you begin to investigate you'll begin to see your fate. . He's everywhere. . You notice him, but pretend to be occupied. . How can you confide in yourself when you lied to your own insides? Cast him aside, go about your day. . Continue to think you're a good person anyway. . You bitch and whine about fairness. . When you show you can be so careless. . When you're in a bind, lost in the cracks of time. . . Maybe you'll be fortunate and discover someone kind. . Born in June, just before the dawn of spring. . Who would've thought that hed've been stopped and outcast as a human being. . He likes to drink. . But then everyone does now and then. . He's on your favorite park bench passed out 9 times outta 10. . You raise your nose up in dismay. . But hey. . You might have his problem one day. . He lives by the bottle, dies by natural selection in his habitat. . While you kids sit home alone wonderin' where your mommy's at. . Well this just goes to show you. . At least you've got one to go to. . Discover what lurks beyond your living room. . Take a look outside. . But when you pass by be sure not to break your stride. . There's many more of us. . All different types of races. . But society must've misplaced us. . After all we're all faceless. . So go take a walk and help us take the mask off and talk. . Cause we're all named john smith when we're outlined in chalk. . Throw us a bone even though you may not like or condone us. . Cause you could one day be one of the friendly neighborhood homeless. . http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...0472#post950472 http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...0474#post950474 http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...0473#post950473 |
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thats really dope man
made me think a little nice piece man 8/10 |
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If you didn't press enter 3 times.. That would be a one line reply. .
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1. YOUR WORDS CARRY ALOT OF MAGNITUDE YOU CAN TELL YOUR NO STRANGER TYO THIS DESPITE YOU HAVENT WRITTEN IN A WHILE YOU CAN STILL SEE YOU MAINTAINED YOUR ABILITIES.
2 AS FAR AS THIS PEACE YOU DID A GREAT JOB.....YOU POSED QUESTIONS AND PHILOSOPHICAL THOUGHT THAT ANYONE CAN TRACE AND RELATE TO SOME POINT IN THERE LIFE. 3.THE SECOND PARAGRAPH UTILIZING THIRD PERSON ADDED A FLAIR TO THIS AND A NEW LEVEL OF THOUGHT.THEN SWITCHING BACK TO FIRST PERSON MAY CONFUSE SOME BUT THATS CAUSE THEY DONT GRASP YOUR WORK.......REAL GOOD DROP I WOULD GO DEEPER BUT IT WOULD BE MEANING LESS YOUR THE WRITTER YOU KNOW WHAT YOU MEANT ITS IS HOT NONE THE LESS. |
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^Word. .
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I couldnt really understand the rap, or wordperfects reply, from the west coast bi atch but it was coo, just dont get down wit it like yall
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^Yeah. . Westcoast thuggin'. . Don't fuck with my ISP NuCCa.
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Dope wax is soo cool
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what you tryna say folks?
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shit is just too easy.
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You know.. that made me chuckle and your drop made me say.. wow that was dope.. this was tite from start to finish.. nice ass drop man
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There's many more of us. . All different types of races. .
But society must've misplaced us. . After all we're all faceless. . True man true. Loved the topic on this and you wrote about it clearly and in an effective way something thats difficult to do and something you don't see alot of on this board. Ya rhyming was good though I got lost a few times and ya vocab was very strong. Originality is what carries this piece though I like it. Return the favour and check my soon to be posted "Drifter" |
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lol. . The vets all come back. . I remember you from when I first joined. .
=) Hiya! |
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C-c-c-cut like a guillotine. .
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NiCCa Whaaaaaaaat?
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Excellent, you lines were all great. The things you say are so true and you say it beautifully. It flowed like a river, the idea was there and it stuck on topic. It was so inspiring to read I know how good it is because when i leave this board i will still remember some of what you said.
Thank You for writing this. My fav line: Cast him aside, go about your day. . Continue to think you're a good person anyway. . You bitch and whine about fairness. . When you show you can be so careless. . |
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