8 lines

10 minutes

Yo lil breeze you just a lil sleeze
tryin to be a player but u always on yo knees
u cant get up cause you fallin like alicia keys
look at me, runnin all over your territory
its my first time, what? cant beat a newB
ill blow you up, with my TNT
you goin down fo show like al gore
if ryhmes was money, youd be dirt poor

hey, this was Lil Breeze's ryhme. There was a little mix up.


lilbreeze's verse:

i may be a newbie but im older then him
im mad nice and spicier then a slim jim
him battlen me is like him havin a death wish
cuz hes gayer then that rock group kiss
imma spit and leave u wantin more
til yo ass drops to the floor, and u get more posts then four
u joined rapbattles 5min ago and u think u can take me
i dont show mercy i spit intensly

well this was wack

but a vote is a vote and both of you would get pretty pissed if you don't get at least one soo.....


openerGo
closer Go


thats pretty much it

both need to elevate

suggestion read up vet battles and go to Tuturials to get some stuff to help you both out


peace

opener: breeze
punhces: tie
flow: breeze
structure: tie
closer: todd

^breeze barely takes it....go todd go...ur verse is way to choppy for me to feel, and it was just like rambling on...until the end when u threw an alright punch for a closer, but thats all u had. at least breeze also had a punch but the rest of the time was glorifying himself a litttle makin it sound aight wit some filler

my vote: breeze