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Old 12-06-03, 05:11 PM   #1
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YO YO YO YO YO YO YO
CHECK IT
CHECK IT
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YO ITS THE UNECLISPABLE\
BUT PHYSICAL\
RIDICOUSLY LYRICAL\
IT A MIRACLE\
THE WAY MY WORDS BLAIR AT YOU\
CATACLIFFICS\
IS THE WAY MY PEOMS SOUND TERRIFIC\
SPITTIN MYSTIC\
SICKENED LYRICS\
STRAIT FROM THE SPIRITS\ OF THE UNLIVING\
DRIVIN\
BY A LEGION\
OF SICKENED LEOPERDS\
DEATH BLURS\ FROM CHEST BURNS\
AND EFFORTS\ FROM MY BRAINS INNER TEXTURES\
CAPABLE OF VERBAL LECTURES\
CAUSING HEART MURMERS\
AND PALPATATIONS\
IM LEADING THE WAY FOR A NEW NATION\
BASTING\ AND CREATING\
A NEW WAY TO BLAZING\
CATS TASTING\
MY DISASTEROUS PHASINGS\
TRACING MY LYRICS CAN CAUSE PREMATURE AGING\
THE SECRET OF MY LOGICAL SCIENCE\
IS DEFIANCE\
ILL RIP YOU TO SHREDS LIKE MY JAWS WERE FROM LIONS\
MY PEEPS RUN DEEP FROM LATIN KINGS TO THE TRIADS\
AND I SPEEK IN A WAY ONLY UNDERSTOOD BY THE DECEASED MAYANS\
WHILE YOUR SWEATIN BULLETS IM HARDLY TRYIN\
IM HIGH FLYIN\
LIKE A EAGLE IN A SKYLINE\
IT SHOULD BE A CRIME THE WAY I DO MY RHYMING\
FIGHTING, THESE WACK EMCEES\
WHO EVERY YEAR BLOW IN LIKE A DAILY BREEZE\
I CRUSH BRAINS AND FREEZE\
EVERY GANGSTER EPISODE IN THEIR DREAMS\
THEN MUSH THEM DOWN LIKE REFRIED BEANS\
CUT THEM UP AND SELL THEM TO HERION PHINES\
WHO END UP BEING RUN-AWAY TEENS\
MORPHINED, FROM THE WAY I DROP\
THESE LYRICALL BARS I CALL HIP HOP\






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Old 12-06-03, 05:38 PM   #2
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You need to leave 3 links or 3 names of people you left feedback to or this will get deleted..

In the begining of this your structure was real bad but towards the end it got better just fix that up and it should be good...you had some good vocab in this though i thought, keep that up.....your flow was ok, could have been better though.....but this was ok...keep at it.
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Old 12-06-03, 05:47 PM   #3
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THATS GOOD BUT
YOU BETTER PUT THA RIGHT WORDS AT THE FIRST COZ THEIR SOME MISTAKES ,
BUT THATS GOOD
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