yo i'm still strugglin in flows but tryna make it better but put down what u think i don't care what u say, just say somethin








i pentatrate vibs through everyone soul, killin niggas by one

thought when i enter ya dome, make'em speechless like you deaf/

niggas have speechinpedamint's after i walk in class an speak my

knowledge of flows, confused in every way u turn/ niggas always

try to learn but turned down like a non hiring job service/ i cut u

open like a disected worm u a nothin like bush when he won office

/ i walk by u in my thug gear an got you spurng by my ways/

niggas always think they can be in my next phase/ never happend

, an never will/ use to be the one on that one man strip/ until i

found my callin an lite thats really say im a pimp/ i got ova da

nigga i thought was my soul/ this boy was really after my

treasure

and gold/ put guards on a 5 sided rock/ got too many on lock/ i'm

da queen of these nigga's domain never got busted by the cops/

or when niggas fucked up i was never to blame/ i sit an listen to

these niggas that wanna put mad flows/ when gurls got mo talk

then most of these niggas got on stock/ flossin they cash an got

video hoe's shakin dey ass/ i think not/ i'm beginner makin it big

wit hits ben # 1 fo the last 20 years never been to top dis

reacord ova a decade/ i put that poetry literture down so people

can connect / this rap shit don't

always hold up this gurl/ so many activies i got going on i should

be richer than a hoe on stage that got 50 cent in her thong/

these gurls just sing i''m thug out type dat rap an no bling/

i put green out fo niggas to surive/ i'm like a lil binladin dat wanna

assasinate bush fo life/ non stop rippin his head off/ makin niggas

an have clinton back in office/ matter of fact i'll be president an

shit an have dem democratic white niggas make all the hard

decisisons and shit/ tired of the same o same raps about money,

cars an big houses/ they can't afford i'm da real deal that rap on

shit that bout truth an not a make belive knief or sword/

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i'm between a beat and a hard place

reply to three open mics and post links to your replies in this thread or it gets deleted.
thanks.

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Life isn't a bitch...
she's just sick of being personified -Sage Francis

ain't nobody uppin this piece

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yo man go reply to 3 other open mics and leave the links to them in here or this wil get deleted. and for a breakdown and the only thing I gotta say is don't write your bars like that. makes it really really really hard to read and figure out where your flow is comin from, work on structure and how to build your lines, if u need any help go peep the wackness emergency center forum and go through some of the examples and such there. elevate bro. peace.

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Not easy to read at all, but I bet you got some skill, keep at it.

how u leave the link ?

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i'm between a beat and a hard place

you go the thread you replies to, copy the text in the address bar, and post it here, so I can check that you did your replies.

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Life isn't a bitch...
she's just sick of being personified -Sage Francis