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Bow B4 ur master mutha fuckers!
haha yea! La! only mutha fucker alive who can put it down like a true G! Lets get it started! I can make it happen 4rm Oaktown 2 Straton One foot in da club an dese bitches is in my lap dancin The romance'in iz so relaxin plus pussys almost promiced Fuckin in da back a my jeep like were at da beach in da Bahamas Bare dick no condoms only skin between der lips, slip in my anaconda an watch it wonder through her hips ![]() Im feelin da love in her, an watchin her legs quiver am i wrong, hustle'in dese bitches up & down like drugdealers haha Thinkin yall can play a cracker, i buck up an watch em back up zip up de jacket an run out da back, b4 i cap em notorious 4 my methods, shady and violent measures My lyrics r so raw that they had 2 B fuckin cencored burnin witnesses eyes out wit fuckin car lighters So I cant be identified if draged into a line up the authoritys ul never catch me slippin sippin 22's in the living room fuckin trippin Go out shootin on dese playa haters! ![]() slighted but never faded! My enemys is waitin! 4-ever Affliliated Mutha Fuckers! haha Affiliated 4 lyfe u know how i do check out http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...4745#post974745 http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=97510 http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...4790#post974790 Last edited by LA_4LYFE : 12-09-03 at 06:28 PM. |
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yo man u need to put 3 people u posted 2 or ur thread gonna b deleted
but it was tight piece i like the way u described shit in there n ur flow was flowin jus elevate on vocab n ur shit will b tiught a hell return de favor http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=97593
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^ Like he said.
Vocab could use some work. Wordplay and flow was all right. Use some more multies. 8/10. Keep em coming. |
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This was ok....your structure needs some work though, in the begining it was alright kinda, try not to make your lines too long or too short like you have, try keeping them around the same length so it helps the flow out....also try adding some multies to help the flow out as well...but keep elevating and keep at it.
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