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Here 2 Stay
IP: 6236 079F
Im game tight, wit a pencil i paint perfect lyrical pictures
Like popeye, i whistle an wink my eye at ebony sisters nibble'in on de ear lobes, watch twitchin b-cause it tickles Like Sickle-Cell, my rhymes r sick an shoot like 9 milli pistols bitches duckin down while im bustin rounds of punz & syllables Ill in the most, unnoticed format, jus ask dese bitches try 2 clap back & get ya ass smacked back into position Ive made da transition 4rm "okay I quess" 2 da sickest An illest, my rhymes cut through skin like circumsitions this was jus a taste a wat MC's wuz missin Here 2 stay and stimulate ear drums, like a clitterous haha LA, ballin all night ya know i had 2 do it just a taste a how i swith it up here 2 stay haha |
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IP: 6FDC 23CB
you need to leave 3 links and 3 names of people you left feedback to or this will get deleted..
but this was alright...structure in this was ok, could use some work though i think.....your vocab was alright in this....flow was ok, try adding some multies and internals to help that out though...but overall this was alright...keep at it. |
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IP: 0363 C8E2
this was actually pretty cool your rhyme scheme is sloppy as fuck which at one look i didn't think this would show any skill. but lyrically you say some hot shit you just need to get it flowin a little better some internals and fat multis would add alot to your skill
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IP: 409D DA38
it was a ight piece for a newb flow was ok wordplay was ight vocab ight punches ok multis ok structure ight over all 6.6/10
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