http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=92906
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...3926#post923926
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...6561#post986561
This motha fucker here drove my car up into a field and got it stuck.. go figure its a FUCKING FIELD and this kid was fucking 15!! anyways.. i was really pissed and I wrote this as a song idea for the black christmas gig were doin tommorow.. as it is its one verse no chorus, just raw freestyle that was done as soon as I found out my car was stuck and the kid was nowhere to be found.. grrr my car just got back from being in the shop for two months now its gonna go back there for some work to the bumper cause the kid hit a fuckin tree..
Anyways here it is:

Merry motha fuckin christmas you got a wish list?
heres a fist you stupid fuckin bitch, i just added you to my hit list
55 stichs is what you will need cause ya fucked wit me
flee the scene cause your scared of our team
seems to me like your stuck in a dream
outta luck and in a position to duck
fuck guns im comin at you with my truck
cause your the schmuck who got my car stuck
I dream of the day that I get to kill you
its true, ill even film you till you turn blue
who the fuck let you drive my car anyways
too many days without it, ill fuckin set you ablaze!
im gonna get the damaged appraised and you betta pay
cause if theres a delay we'll be comin to spray your whole family
take it as a threat or take it as a bet
whatever ya wanna call it, it will be handled by vets
dont forget cause im upset and i wont have any regrets
fuckin space cadets flying around like they lost
you crossed me and your 15 now your gonna get tossed
you cost me a whole lot and now your caught
ya brought it on yourself so pop a squat
let me connect your head to this infrared dot
a solid shot to let your body rot

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thought this made for a interesting read, culd have been executed better thought to get it across.....the flow was knocked a bit by the structure.....i would have done away with rhyming the same words on the first bar...as thats what gets ppl absorbed...so....but in general this was ok......with a bit more work...up the vocab n shit....yeah........pZ.....

return the favour on this.....
http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthr...&threadid=98495

it hot (funny) but yea up the vocab

This was alright....Structure could use some work though....try making your lines around the same length so it helps the flow out...vocab in this was alright, could be up'd though i think....flow in this was ok, it fell off though in this...but overall this was alright...keep at it.