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Old 12-14-03, 09:35 PM   #1
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depression

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in this thing called life i am alone
noone cares...noone even knows...
noone cares if i'm alive or dead
and noone cares wherther i'm happy or sad
and noone cares wherther i feel betrayed or not
and noone cares what i feel inside...
noone cares if my feelings are good or bad
and noone cares if i really wanna be dead
and noone cares whether i'm around or not
and noone cares if i kill or not
and noone really cares anything bout me...
so here i go heres the end of this thing....
noone ever cared
noone was ever there
now heres ur chance to see
the feelings that were inside of me..
because of you i felt hurt
betrayed
sad
and everything thats bad
now thx to u and the feelings you brought...
i am no more...
i'm put in the ground to rot
in my final resting place...



sry y'all but you know my stuffs purly vent till i get over it enough to work on it again...thx for reading and understanding this
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Old 12-15-03, 11:47 AM   #2
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with out you have saying anything after this, you still would be able to tell that this was a vent, for the fact that emotions were so alive and strong. You put so many reasons in this as to why you are depressed, that any body that reads can see where you are coming from and relate to you some how or another. Its a topic that gets done alot, for its felt by millions of ppl, but you still kept it interesting, and yet simple enough for ppl to understand you. nice piece. Keep your head up, good things are bound to come!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

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Old 12-15-03, 06:31 PM   #3
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thx for the feed back..its always so positive....
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Old 12-15-03, 06:45 PM   #4
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hey if you dont try to stay positive, the negatives will eat you whole with very slim chances of getting out of its belly!!!!! look for the good things, sometimes they are hard to find.

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Old 12-15-03, 10:57 PM   #5
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lol thx thats really good advice....i'll remember that
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Old 12-16-03, 12:25 PM   #6
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it was straight but simple and to the point
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