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Old 12-16-03, 02:18 AM   #1
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If my soul could reach out and touch you like AT&T
I wonder what it would say...........




You and I were destined
destined with such spontaniety at once it seemed surreal
and partially invisible like the clouds in the night
our ride or die demeanor almost dream-like but not
as if a child from la la land just in spite
is calling our names, playin games with our emotions
and telling us to greet change
with admiration...
giving us a new found reason for the seasons
to move on, to be strong, we're happy, fully content and
"I AM YOU, AND YOU ARE ME, AND TOGETHER WE ARE ONE"
and its special cuz we both know
there's no boundaries,
no prisons no cages
naive to those who oppose
but regardless we're willing and ready
to recieve the inevitable and uncertain path
we've chosen
to participate in the merathon labled
"a lover's quest"
its miraculous because we dont know and dont care to know where it ends
its all about you and me
me and you
a love in coherency
beyond composure


("when i see my baby boo, i get foolish")
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Old 12-16-03, 08:44 AM   #2
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Tha's so sweet... I have to admit I didn't think it was going to be as good as it was when I first read it. But then I liked it... you caught my attention with well placed vocabulary in the first line... I think that's really what gets me, the simply placed complex words in a poem and you displayed this tallent well. I liked it because there was still some 'thug' type content in it... with the ride or die but you tossed it up and made it intellegent.... not just expressing on a low level but you spoke to all. You displayed your feelings in a well composed manner, congrats... peace
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Old 12-16-03, 12:22 PM   #3
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i see you is a lover boy that was sweet as hell
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Old 12-16-03, 01:23 PM   #4
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thanx calisto, i agree with everything you said. thanx for your honesty, that makes me a better writer. And im a not a boy hotrod, but is sweet.
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Old 12-16-03, 02:08 PM   #5
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^^^^post your three replies before i delete this

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