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Old 12-23-03, 10:45 AM   #1
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Los Angeles State of Mind

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Los Angeles is the emerald city of the west/
Proud to be a part of this territory that i bless/
got nothing against the rest in the game of chess/
make a move, and stand on the booth to spit da sickness/
testing my style to start some business in south central/
were owning a heat is essential, for my survival in a shit pile/
this aint no urban lifestyle, were nieghbor's ask fo sugar in a cup/
here, da stakes are high like a vegas night, trouble cant hide/
cuz some seek it to begin pandemoneum so wicked/
talkin about da boys in tha blue uniform, 1# in my shit list/
yeah, da coppas, show stoppas that kill the joy as i avoid/
anotha altercation with a baton and a gun, just for their fun/
like to inflict terror on a young cat as they abuse authority/
this aint only me, actually got complaints of the whole minority/
fucking pigs don't be doing that to da whiteys at da university/
shit like dat makes me mad, feelin like i been had so silly/
cold blooded pricks, i am gonna regulate like billy, do ya feel me/
Cant have a goodtime in the city of angels were life dangels/
i'm out with da l.a state of mind that chokes you and strangles/
your air till ya sufficate and stare at my face as violate/
the laws of this state, killafornia set to retaliate/
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Old 12-23-03, 10:52 AM   #2
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Follow the rules, ..3 names/links to open mic's replyed on else this will be closed..
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Old 12-23-03, 04:08 PM   #3
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follow some other rules as well, like rhyming couplets which you forgot in the middle of this verse, try and get some originality and draw on your real life experience for added imagery. also try and up your vocab and add a multi or two for the sake of fluidity.
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