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1.My life:You Strong Enough?!...........by. Ape
2.Fuck'em...........by.Deva
3.first rhyme for RB.com...........by.WhiteRhymes







Yo this is a lil sumthin I put together fo yall so tell me wut ya think.........





I been ~smoking~ in ~motion~,Lyrical ~potion~,~arrosin~,Grab the baby oil with some ~Lotion~ cuz this hoe just ~awoken~//
My bombs an ~explosion~,Aint staying calm for no~hoe shit~,trying to get this "money and paper" ~So quick~ how you going to be a "pimp"?...With ~No Flex~//
My flow is ~so sick~,everbody already ~knows it~,I have more flow than the Damn...~Pacific Ocean~//
You are a "sexual areobic",My rims spinning like ~Spin tops~,no way that~ youre hott~,I got idea...~Im hott~ and ~Youre not~//
Smoking pots,like ~food crops~,like Dalmations you ~have spots~,Have spots?What damn ~Spot~?The "Damn Spot" on your head....~POP!~//{Its bust now}
Now im going around the ~School Block~,my brain losser than a ~Loose Top~,The girls take a look at my "Penus",they say it's a Gangsta like ~TU-Pac~//
Now im hitting a "new Block~,Looking for hotties and hot ~Money~,I probably aint "J Lo" but when I get mine,im gone be like ~Aint it Funny~?////

{Chorusx2}
Smoke cars and money....{thats all i need}
Smoke cars and money...{To please my needs}
Smoke cars and money,smoke cars and money,Smoke cars and money...{Now let me free}

I got a Exipdition,aint in know conditon,to be spittin/
Im so high if i look at the sky my eyeballs gone look Supersticous/
Ready to grant wishes,like Grandpa's catch fishes,but i dont catch fishes,I smoke,get money,and test bitches/
Im religous,but smoke it's like a freind to me,just picture a ice out,smokin Statue of Liberty//
Hell naw i dont spit for free,Bulletproof turn down a G,If i get shot right about now my level will still increase//
Got throw back Proof's on my feet,I dont need no G's or no speech,I'll put your Vocals cords out your system on purpose,just not to hear you speak/
Dont bust in the restroom,im taking a leak,Money thats what i freak,I have a Throwback gold in my mouth and add to that a throwback jeep/
Now that would put you to sleep,cuz you will only have that in your dreams,Like computer it been installed and establish,but not for free//
Im through bout rapping bout Smokein,cars,and Mon-ey,Now im bout to bang two honeys,and guess what im bout to have "Jungo Fever" for fucking a Playboy Bunny/Get it?



yo yall give me sum feedback and tell me wut ya think of my wordplay and structure you know shit like dat

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"The Legion" takes no prisoners!

I can be nice but dont make me mad....cause when I loose control.......your dead !!

my site:http://freestyleman.proboards25.com/index.cgi

This was ok....but you need to work on your structure though...your lines are too far stretched out, try to shorten them down a lot so its structured well..and so it helps the flow out in your pieces...also try adding some multies but keep at it.

elevate. lose your ~~~~ puncuation.

I need mo feedback homies and oh yeah thanks fo da recent feedback yall.......................peace

__________________
"The Legion" takes no prisoners!

I can be nice but dont make me mad....cause when I loose control.......your dead !!

my site:http://freestyleman.proboards25.com/index.cgi

yo homies I wanna get peoples voting in dis battle so here.........................http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthr...threadid=100029

__________________
"The Legion" takes no prisoners!

I can be nice but dont make me mad....cause when I loose control.......your dead !!

my site:http://freestyleman.proboards25.com/index.cgi

what masta C said... and lose the gangsta image... its kinda boring... add multis, and lose the ~, makes it hard to read

didn't really like this, it seemed to simple, step up your vocab a little, and if a stupid line comes that rhymes like " Grandpa's catch fishes" throwem away and think a little harder, a few words used a couple times that kind of throws it off, but keep at, and lets see where you get, hold em down