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Old 12-18-03, 08:15 PM   #1
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Love Sick

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There's a girl right now that i refuse to name
but she thinks i'm nothing more than a game
everytime i try something, things go wrong
she says she'll call back, but it takes too long

sometimes i wonder if out of the blue she will call
and sometimes i wonder if she likes me at all
many girls tell me that they want me to be their lover
i tell them that i can't , that my heart belongs to another

this girl is special, she can do many things
my heart jumps everytime i hear the phone ring
i hope that is her on the other side
but it ends up being some other guy

everytime she's around she makes me feel warm inside
i feel like i can jump one thousand feet in the sky
i wish that i could just tell her how i feel
and let her know that all my feelings are real

when i lay in my bed at night thinking of her
i think of all the things that happend in a blur
all i wanted to do is hold her tight
but i just end up telling her good night

i don't even know why i wake up anymore
everyday it seems like my life is such a bore
why is it that she dates some other guy?
is it because it's my heart she wants to deny?

is this some kind of sick joke?
do YOu think that my love is just a hoax?
FUCK YOU , YOU DON'T KNOW WHAT I'M FEELIN'
YOU DON'T KNOW WHAT IT'S LIKE TO BE SPINNING FROM THE CEILING !

my friends tell me that i'm wasting my time
they tell me to go fuck a ho that is worth a dime
they're wrong though i'm going to have a purpose in this world
i'm going to change the feelings of this girl

i guess this is why i go with my friends to get high
because one day i'm going to say good bye
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Old 12-18-03, 09:37 PM   #2
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umm this was nice..it was straight to the point strictly displayin ya feelings i liked it..maybe could be elevated on a few things but ima newbie so i dont wanna be deliverin suggestions i dont own.. i did like it and maybe you should let this girl know i been in this sitch and she could feel like that as well..well holla atcha lata keep it up mann..
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Old 12-18-03, 10:10 PM   #3
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Old 12-18-03, 10:55 PM   #4
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damn brian2488 your shit was off da chain, I liked your set up, structure, flow, but I think this has a deeper feeling to it man.

Tight ASs ShIt!
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