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I'm sittin in my room, just hearin' some beats/
Then i hear sirens, here come the police/
I go out to the front door, what the fuck's goin' on/
there were 12 dead bodies sprawled out on my lawn/
the pig said," sir, you need to do some explainin'"/
I started tellin' him the story, he knew i weren't playin'/




There were some niggas messin around last night/
shoutin' some shit, like they wanted to fight/
I was a little bored, so i went out side/
them bitches hit me like tsunami tide/
i got away, some how, i got handed a little bit of luck/
them bitches wanted more, (what the fuck)/
I came back out of my house with my hands behind my back/
They came runnin', you probably thinks guns is what i packed/
but when the man took a huge swing at me/
i stabbed him in the throat with a car key/
the next dude came, i had plenty more weapons/
when the fork got him in the eye, he stopped his steppin'/
the 3rd guy, ran cuz he got a little scared/
i stabbed him with a pencil, now he's visually impaired/
I lifted that guys cash and his machine gun/
people were screamin' like they saw a homerun/
With that gun, took 9 more human lives/
Everyone on the street should of heard the cries/



That is the whole little story officer/
it was self-defense, do you concurr/
and also watch out for that leg, right thurr/

hahaha, i was just having some fun with this piece.

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i wasn't too serious !
haha
~peace~

this was a good piece, i liked the originality of your choice in weapons
stay up playboy

thanks, i have never been complimented on my choices
of murderous tools and appliances.
lol

lets get s'more feedback

Two words:Therapy...wait...thats one...anyway, very...unique...structures a bit off, but I liked it anyway, good job and keep it up

i liked it..........nice little fun peice here...........it'd be a good video.........wanted more tho................u sed there was 12 ded bodies...........you only killed 3?, but in general the vocab was decent flow was decent structure was decent..........enjoyment was good................nice job here...............hit my open mic up wen i post later..........

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Yo man that was psychotic.....ya structure was different zBut Your psychotic so it worked........ya FLow worked to I Liked the way ya Used it..........Shit some Good WrodPlay In that and help the Imagery.........There was Some Tight Weapons taht i Wouldn't Really Use Because Im no psychotic....All and all Nice work man It was Good.....P.€.a.c.€......
-by the Way i was Joken With The psychotic bits LOL

It was pretty good man decent spit

ROFL I LOVE IT

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