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Old 02-09-04, 02:53 PM   #1
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the names big-j and i aint here to brag
i aint tryin to piss you off or make you mad
people diss my rap skill all the time
before they get chance to hear me ryme
yea i talk a lot of shit but i can back it up
like when i tell ya to ya face me and your bitch like to fuck
for you little people that talk a lot of shit
us fat people gather all our spit
you heard more cushion for the pushin
well us fat people have more dick for the chick
now im gonna hand it over to my friend in the click


this teflon
I spit crazy flows that these hoes love ta swallow
blow ya ass into peices wit a clip fulla hollows
right now u fuckin wit da wrong clique
later on u be at the crib suckin on my dick
im not tha type ta play games
kiil u witout given a fuck about ya name
teflon tha supreme king
tell ya girl im over our little fling
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Old 02-09-04, 06:47 PM   #2
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you need to carry the rhyming further and elaborate on ya scheme its basic... introduce some internals.. n flip it around a bit... it will add to the read... its no good jus having a good content... which in this case was ok...
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Old 02-10-04, 03:48 AM   #3
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Old 02-10-04, 10:36 AM   #4
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Yeah this was alright....like dev said add some internals or some multies to this to make it more complex, it was simple rhyming....try working on some better content as well, something maybe you can relate to....but this was ok overall....keep at it.
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