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Old 12-18-03, 09:58 AM   #1
CrackaBox187
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to early for all this

IP: C430 9FB2

We some hard ass niggas,
and we deep in this game,
let a nigga talk shit,
hard to think without your brains,
Ima take your hoe,
bend her up grab her legs,
flip back round,
and get a lil head,
ridin in tha lac,
with a body in the back,
scalp this nigga,
over a lil crack,
can't step to these young niggas,
hard niggas, thug niggas,
feel this steel,
let me see your blood nigga,
hug your mouth around my snub nigga,
sneeze nigga, pulla trigga,
blow a hole nigga,
throught you and hoe niggas

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Old 12-18-03, 10:12 AM   #2
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alright... this would have been better if you would've put it into
this kinda structure...

We some hard ass niggas, and we deep in this game,
let a nigga talk shit, hard to think without your brains,
Ima take your hoe, bend her up grab her legs,
flip back round, and get a lil head,
ridin in tha lac, with a body in the back,
scalp this nigga, over a lil crack,
can't step to these young niggas,
hard niggas, thug niggas,
feel this steel, let me see your blood nigga,
hug your mouth around my snub nigga,
sneeze nigga, pulla trigga,
blow a hole nigga, throught you and hoe niggas


now all that you need to do is fill in the lines to make em as even
as possible... it will definately help out your flow...
and dont rhyme nigga wit nigga, lmao ( i aint one to say that word)
but yo... it cool as hell in this case right?
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Old 12-18-03, 10:39 AM   #3
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aight A.T. Thanx yo hold'em down
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Old 12-18-03, 02:58 PM   #4
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Yeah this was ok....you just need to work on your structure like A.T. Showed you and it will all come together then...and keep all the lines even so it helps the flow out...try adding a few more multies to this though to help it out...but keep at it.
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