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12-22-03, 04:49 PM
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IP: F934 2C2B
i might be new to r&b but my beat speaks//
louder than words herbs get ripped harder// than cal ripkens home run derbies// ya get herpies unda ya lip and trip on my lyrics// when i open my mic and my words form everyone// runs to hear it like tha grand opening to western steer n shit// got bitches yellin im oh so loco cause// my barz can cause heart attacks like a open choke hold// ya get stoked when ya get to hold my pen// i attack from back ya piss and whine like it was a sin// im just spittin varities of shit not a main topic// but im still nah goin quit neva gonna forfeit// im on top of a drop off ledge droppin// books and books of shit ive done and said// ya on the steep hill starin like it was the 4th July// thinkin its fireworks flarin but ya just stoned to high// thats what i got tha ability to do got the injunity// to have tha rest ya newbies stripped and screwed// just droppin shit to see where i can get in this site..........iight peace no good subject just variated throughout it ill leave my replies in the next post |
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12-22-03, 04:50 PM
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IP: F934 2C2B
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12-22-03, 04:54 PM
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IP: 399E F0FD
..I'm not really feeling this piece..not to hate on you but..your content,vocab,etc..was too simple for me..hopefully your next piece is much better...looking forward to it...
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12-22-03, 04:55 PM
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IP: F934 2C2B
there wasnt much put in to it so it was great but thanx fo the reply
ill post somethin later that prob kick this shit |
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12-22-03, 05:18 PM
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IP: F302 444A
Good shit.
SCot Free is what da game needs |
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12-22-03, 05:36 PM
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IP: 9C1E 2B43
^ Leave better feedback..
But this was ok...your structure was ok...it could use touched up though, try keeping your lines around the same length....try adding some multies to it and internals to help the flow and to make it better...but just keep elevating and keep at it. |
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12-23-03, 01:25 PM
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IP: F934 2C2B
yo elevate lil bit more when ya get better and feel like battlin hit me up fo one to get some experience unda ya belt
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12-23-03, 01:28 PM
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IP: F934 2C2B
iight dropz i battle ya ass right now if ya want just go set it up and i will even spit first..................
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12-23-03, 01:30 PM
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IP: F934 2C2B
iight check it out on frontlines then post and ill drop afta ya
10 lines up no d/r votes u spt first |
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