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Tragedy Due To Hate
IP: D43A A8CC
A White Boy Actin Black, So Kids Love To Hate
He's Told His Style Is Wack, As The Kids Continue To Descriminate Full Of Pain, The Boy Keeps Quiet And Continues His Life He's Called Wigger For A Name, Anger In Him Is Now In A Rife His Spark Has Been Lit, As Murder Goes Through His Mind A Little Bit He's Sick Of All Tha Shit, He Juss Wishes These Kids Would Quit Anger At Boiling Point, And Yet No One Still Conceives Smokes A Joint, To Stimulate Tha Mind As He Believes Blazed Off Dope, He's Ready To Get Even Conceals A Rope, To Stop What Kids Are Believin As The Kids Continue The Hate, He Hangs Himself Destroy's His Fate, With Out Askin For Relentless Help Now He's Dead, Hate Decreases To A Lower Rate Kids Think In There Head, We Caused This Tragedy Due To Hate My First Topical In A While And I Seriously Need Elevation I Kno That So Dont Hate To Bad
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IP: 2A20 D9B5
Son you callin me whack and you know you suck dick...
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BANNED: Cheater
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IP: 4577 CD9A
that was kinda deep yo i give u a 8/10
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IP: D43A A8CC
Quote:
Yo Fat Boy Dont Start Talkin Shit If You Got Somethin Ta Say Call Me Out Then! I'll Lyrically Rip (What LITTLE Skill You Got) Apart
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IP: 2A20 D9B5
When that happens, Ja will beat 50 nigga. you don't know me, my skills, or none of that shit, and you for damn sure can't beat me. when you want me to mop the floor wit ya boy?
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Banned: Permanent
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IP: 5F2A E1C0
Stop Hatin Homo
Not Bad For A First Could Use Sum Improvment But Not Bad None The Less Short.. Make The lines Shorter. And Direct Hit Up Any 3 Of My Pieces |
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IP: 2A20 D9B5
ayo aus you seen what i did wit g. butters right? and you know how i kill right? let him know... he fuckin wit the livest
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IP: 6C10 AFD5
dat shit was iight but u gotta hit niggaz were it hurts baby one
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IP: F9CB 2E62
wasnt great,but wasnt bad,
espcially as its your first topical for a while, in some places the flow was good, but in some it felt off, like you tried squeezing a extra word in here and there that didnt really go, rhymescheme was ok but could do with a little work, overall average drop.but keep writin and you will improve.. peace |
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IP: 32D9 0BD3
Yeah whateva..ain't bad ain't bad..work on your multis yo..peace
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IP: F059 8F64
Ay man. Don't worry bout dem haters man. They jus tryna get unda ur skin. Dis was a nice piece. It was deep and had great emotion in da rhyme. U told a good story in dis piece. Short but sweet.
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IP: 45B8 F4DC
Actually Yo......
This is a true story My boy Robby *RIP* Got called a wigger so much And he would literatly get jumped for actin black This year he hung himself Because he got sick of all the shit he was goin through And yo keyes.... i kno you Matter a fact, i almost fucked ya cousin Angela You can't say i dont kno you, i kno enough bout you
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IP: 6D17 AB35
yo man the was DEEP.....
i was feeling ya man on this.... not bad For a first ya structure was Good...... ya flow was Nice man so all round not bad for a first...... Keep it Dropin man.. ...P.€.a.c.€... |
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IP: C430 9FB2
AY dawg i liked the shit cuz thats how shit happens, everyone thinks that man was in the wrong but they don't see it was the prep fags with money that don't know shit about havin to do shit on they own, or mother fuckin havin to hustle to eat, everythings just handed to them, holdem down n do what cha do
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IP: 4C3A 2782
reply to three other open mics and post links to your replies or this thread gets deleted.
thanks.
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