Ya Kno. . It's Like A Question Of If You Believe In Fate. . Cause This Girl, Ya Kno What I'm Sayin, I Love Her. . But I Jus Can't Figure Out What's Gone Happen. . So I'm Puttin This Shit In Fate's Hands. .

I Lie Awake At Night, Turnin' N Tossin', I Can't Sleep
I Can't Creep, Eat, Or Drink, I'm At A Loss N Can't Think
You're Always My Mind, It's Like A Constant Trip
The Fondness Tip, I'm On It N I Been On That Shit
I Been Home To Sit N Gather Up My Thoughts
Fathom On The Loss, Up N At-Um, I'm The Boss
I Move My Weight, No Break, 'Cept To Think About Ya Face
At This Rate, You Could Know I Love You On My Dyin' Day
I Try N Say, How I'm Feelin, But The Shit Jus Keep Consealin'
I Ain't Tryna Play The Villian, But I Jus Can't Seem To Reveal This
So I Don't Leave It Up To Me Anymore, Any Door I Pick
Can't Jus Solve The Shit Quick, I Don't Need To Instrict
You With The Wrong Idea, Cause I Love You My Dear
And My Tears That Fall, Signifies That For The Rest Of My Years
That I Will Deny My Fear, Bring You Near, N See It Clear
My Current State Is Set To Aggravate, I'm Agitated Baby
Fragments Of Thoughts Tossed On Tablets Drive Me Fuckin' Crazy
I Try Not To Let It Phase Me, Letter Signed With Love, Now Wait
For The Better To Combine With Up Above N Set This Straight
No Opposite Of Positive On The Verdict For This Case

Now I Put My Love In The Fragile Hands Of Fate
The Shadow Of Past Battles, Flash In Front Of My Face
I Kno I Love You But Am I Waitin On A Mistake ?
On The Shaky Plate Of Fate I Await, To See If You Will Stay

I Don't Want Any Confusion On This Friendship Transfusion
From Best Buds To Love, It's A Win, We Ain't Losin'
I'm Crusin' On The Bolevard, N Damn, There You Are
Beauty With No Flaws, I Want It All, I Stop To Talk
You Balk That Walk, Halt N You Say What Up To Me
Nothin' Baby, It's This Love You See That Got Me Feelin Energy
The Air You Breath Is Crisp, Ya Hair Sails Like Ships In The Wind
Ya Hips Are A Ten, But Where Do I Begin Again ?
To Approach You N Let Fate Coax You As More Than A Friend
I Wanna Give You My Heart, Been Into You Since The Start
Fate Makes Or Breaks Us, Takes Us To Or Far Apart
You See Now ? You Can't Leave Me Now, Leave Me Down
Specially When I Need That Smile To Compliment Frown
You're God's Best Accomplishment N I Need You To Feel Proud
I See You In That Crowd, That I'm Not Quite Aquainted With
I Don't Want This Tainted Shit, But Witcha Girls I Gotta Babysit
My Words, N Not Disperse Of Feelings, I Don't Wanna See The Faces
Lookin' All Over The Place N Distastin' What I Jus Stated
I Jus Wanna Make It, I Can Take It, Kno Your Incredible
Don't Won't Our Love To Be Regretable, Let's See What's Acceptable

Now I Put My Love In The Fragile Hands Of Fate
The Shadow Of Past Battles, Flash In Front Of My Face
I Kno I Love You But Am I Waitin On A Mistake ?
On The Shaky Plate Of Fate I Await, To See If You Will Stay

Now I Must Elaborate On Past Pains And Aches
Tried To Navigate To Ya Heart But Had To Evacuate
I Must Admit You Lookin' Like A Fashion Plate
N My Passion's Great, But I Don't Wanna Be Lachin' On Too Late
Too Great, Is My Evident Feelings For Which I Hold Within
My Roll Is Thin, Pimpin' No Longer Prevelant, Sold My Sins
Told To Spend, Quality Time, Solemnly Rhyme N Swear
To Stare Into Your Eyes, N Declare I Can't Compare
You To Another Woman, I Don't Need A Spare Please
I Jus Wanna Family, Shoot The Breeze, N Be Free
Allow Me To Be, The One You Call Upon For Consolin'
Head On Shoulder, Then I'm Knowin This Here Jus Ain't Foldin'
We Gone Keep Holdin' On To What We Have, Ya Kno?
I'm Jus Hopin' While Losin' Focus On This Smoke That
Fate Shows N Doesn't Disappoint Me With A Fact
That I Don't Wanna Hear, No I'm That Dude From Detroit
Who Rhymes About His Wife, You Worth The World Girl
N Thas A Point, I'm Willin' To Stick To, Butterflies On Swirl
Fate Dictates Our Pace, Girl Ya Make Me Get A Taste
Of What I Want, But I Have To Wait, Cause Today's The Day

Now I Put My Love In The Fragile Hands Of Fate
The Shadow Of Past Battles, Flash In Front Of My Face
I Kno I Love You But Am I Waitin On A Mistake ?
On The Shaky Plate Of Fate I Await, To See If You Will Stay

. . Let's See What's Really Gone Happen. .

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Emotional. Some very creative lines i'd quote but i'm in a rush. I liked the point of view this is from. and how you ut forth a consistant effort to emphisize on your thoughts. very dope. creative and enjoyable read.

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The Weathers Art
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Secluded
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...851#post1148851
Open Your Eyes
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Yeah i agree this was a good piece here.....i enjoyed the read man....your structure was good through out the piece....as was your flow, it stayed on point through out the whole thing i thought....nice vocab....overall i thought this was real nice....keep at it.

yea Formula this was Good..ya Flow is Good Like always I enjoy Reading ya stuff......ya structure is Pretty Good Like Normaly...and ya Vocab was good and Helped the Imagery In My Head worked well with your Wordplay and Made this Piece Work in Ya rhyme scheme.......so all and all man this was Nice One Of the Betta Open Mics On RB..PeacE..

the angle you hit this from was nice..... flow n everything esle was decent aswell.... an enjoyable read.....a good length too...
yeah...nice work...pZ

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damn this shit is filled with multis, and good flow and i like it alot
But The emotion that really got me thats what im about
i dont really have weak emotions and niether does this peice this is hott
i hope u can return the favor
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...threadid=105199

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