no line limit just dont make it a book
verse due 2 hours after check in
you must check in within the hour

house rules

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topic noises in the basement

check in

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i know this is wack but whatever

(Point of View of a 7 year old)

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lOL that ish was funny

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^^ dawg...its 2 a fuckin clock in da morning...I'll check in and post 2moro

see u then


and LOL @ u dictatin line limits and shit...geesh

lata

dawg i was gunna set it at 30but i wasnt sure if i would make it 35 so i just said unlimited just incase

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This is a true story..
I was about 10 when..


My peeps decided to move to a secluded house..close to the woods..
It had white posts and brown shingles..we were folks from the hood..
So, the excited of a back yard was quite large..dual garage spaces..
I was riveted when it hit me that I was going to room in the basement..
The first night was all fright..but I noticed all night a light from the hall..
Right through my door to the adjacent room..it was like a light on the wall..
But, all the lamps were out so it didn't make sense..and then it shifted..
Moved up the wall a few inches..my body froze in place like a stiff gets..
The chills hit my neck and travelled down my spine..I was in a panic..
I managed to get up to shut my door..but the light had already vanisnhed..
I ran back and jumped under the covers..I almost bumped my head..
My breathing was shallow and quick..sweat drenched my bunk bed..
I thought it was all over when a moment later I heard a voice that said..
"Get out..get out of this house now, or you will all be dead"..
It was fight or flight..so I dashed up a flight of stares to my peeps..
Out of breath, I could barely speak.."We gotta..gotta..get out..please.."
But, they thought I was just having a bad dream..so I stayed the them..
The next day, moved all my shit upstairs becuz the basement was grim..


**But, that's not all folks**mhuahahaaaaaa


Weeks later, that same basement became our family room..like a den..
When one night, we heard the sound of a child laughing..but kind of dim..
After that, it became bumping in the ceilings..we were feeling puzzled..
And once the noises became constant..we started to wonder..
Come to find out..the house built before ours had burned to the ground..
There were 2 fatalities in all..Mrs. Caldwell and her child..



**True Story..my mother still lives in that house..the original plumbing was laid in 1967..She had my grandmother, who is a minister, bless the house a few years ago. To this day, anyone who goes in that house feels like something is watching you when you walk up the stairs from the basement. You hear all kinds of strange noises.


geesh...still gives me the chills to tell that story

I give this one to black sinz because his was awesome in the rhyming, his opener was crazy, and his closure put the topic to its fame. so all together my vote goes to crazy and oh yea hit up in this battle so I can close it plz.
http://community.rapbattles.com/showthread.php?t=127385

hahaha....damn n-sight..u mess wit da wrong ppl..hahaha...he hella killed you!!!!!!!!!!!

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black sinz
structure woz nice,easy to read
very well detailed verse.flowed very well
u rhymed every line
that shit woz real funny
overall im gonna say 8/10-very gud verse...maybe cud use sum multis n more creative wordplay but woz a very gud spit

n-sight
structure woz ok but i felt ya lines were 2 long...flow woz aight,but cud b beta wit shorter linez....ur shit woz a true story so im feelin that.....but wasnt as funny n jus didnt grab my attention same as the ova cats....also a few of ur lines didnt rhyme which threw off the flow
it woz aiight but u cud do a lot beta6/10

vote-black siinz

NICE PRE WRITTEN Black...shouldn't have let u choose the topic...shudda known yu had shit already laid out...coo tho

u win some...u lose some...

Next time..I CHOOSE the topic...cuz this basement shit was fucked up from the jump


hmpf

Im out

N-Sight
u had some alright flow considering ure lines were pretty stretched, ure structure was good cuz u kept ure shit together. u stayed on topic which is always gud and u told a gud story, it was quite chilling. u had gud wordplay in there but some of it was pretty basic but overall u dropped a gud topical verse.

Blak Siinz
playa u had sum tight flow and structure, i think u did better than n-sight in this department playa. ure verse was fuckin hilarious and i got far more enjoyment from it than n-sight's especially at the end when ure mom killed u. that shit was funny dawg!!
only problem was it sounded more like a nursery rhyme than a topical verse. also u kind of fell off topic at the end with ure mom killin u even tho it was funny. u had basic wordplay all the way thru to which let u down.

OVERALL
i'm givin this battle to n-sight cuz he had more complex vocabs and wordplay and he stayed on topic throughout, even tho i enjoyed blak's more cuz that was funny. u shud drop that shit in open mic or the poetry part!!
a little tip n-sight...when u get a battle set up set the votin to at least 100 posts to vote so u dont get any of these herb voters who don't know wat they talkin about!!

V/ - N-Sight

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How do u do that? cuz I'd def. do it from now on...

.::N-Sight::i like you shit better. i like that real life shit dawg, my old house wa sliek that and shit. scary shit.blak siinz no hard fellings but you shit was cool too, comical though. .::N-Sight::.'s shit was nice, alittle long but i like the ending. that shit makes you think..::N-Sight::. had a batter imagination. thats my verdict.

vote=.::N-Sight::.

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