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07-10-05, 12:10 PM
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Skadoosh!
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Staring Death In The Face
IP: 2EF7 66B7
Staring Death In The Face
An Open Mic by LL Cool K. I stand frozen, the rain clouding my view before it strikes the ground Unable to see my end coming, my fate sealed by one fatal sound A split second left of existence and my entire life flies by my eyes My actions, the good and the bad add up to equal my grand demise Suffering disbelief in my good deeds, my hopeful memory mourns Filled with the knowledge that I’m destined to fall before devils horns A never-ending existence of torture is what my thoughts have guessed No! I must have hope that I will kneel before God as a spirit blessed Almost upon me, I feel the piercing shroud of death burrow into my chest A thought of dread still shadowing my hope as my body lays down to rest The inescapable end comes; it carries an image of a faceless hooded figure The black hole within its hood holds a sinister grin that’s getting bigger My eyes are forever closed; the darkness has teeth as it swallows me whole The blackness caresses me, cleansing my naked body, purifying my soul My mind becomes empty; I no longer possess a memory, not even my name I am a broken frame, heading to my fateful end like a moth to the flame Guided to my feet I stand before a question, into the light or the fire? As my body is pulled to the heat my mind reaches out for the light I desire It is not meant to be though, I watch as the light pours into my fiery grave The burning gates await me; I am condemned to be pain’s eternal slave I can feel the heat and it is unbearable, my limbs go numb and I collapse Edging closer, I hear my heart beat, is this my second chance? Perhaps, It beats again to the rhythm of new hope; my mind wills it to beat faster I pull away from hell’s gates; I pull away from the devil’s maniacal laughter Thoughts, memories, they come flooding back, I awaken into the night I see the stars through glass windows as I lay down surrounded by light Next to me I see a man relieved; he tells me my heart is at a steady pace I smile as I fall into slumber knowing that I just stared death in the face LINK: http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=198907
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07-10-05, 02:34 PM
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Skadoosh!
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IP: 2EF7 66B7
thnx...............more feed please..........i will RTF on any open mics
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07-10-05, 02:43 PM
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Flyweight
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IP: 3450 F354
^ yea i agree wit messenger,,,,, this is a nice drop......... writin woz small cudnt c it very well
but the whole rap woz real gud.........lookin forward to mor drops........ ~1~ http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=195552 ---> return the favour...  9/10 |
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07-10-05, 03:48 PM
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B.I.G.
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IP: DD02 1081
Damn, nice one
I loved that structure, flow was perfect, neva lost I didn't saw much multi's but aight, nice vocab... overall 9/10 good creativity
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07-11-05, 06:32 PM
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Witness, 4 God, 4-Ever
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IP: 1CEA FD77
yeah this was great, flow and structure were very good, imagery was great almost felt like i was there, keep em comin man...
http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=199399
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