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11-23-03, 03:47 PM | #1 | |||||||
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Lead or be Lead!!
IP: 07E0 A9F2
Ya either lead, or ya lead, in living that’s the way of life
Ya cant do both, well most, cos like a fork needs a knife A blade to cut and the other holds what’s been sliced Hierarchy structured to ensure high scores on life’s dice -Equal rights is one way to play but causes disruption Leaving people in conflict to their assigned function An injunction of ruling would cause global uprising Compromising the race provoking war and disorder -Freelance marauders, bringing chaos and gun happy slingers Then where’s the winners, overtook by maniac sinners Like TV dinners, quick to heat but unhealthy to ya system It’s no easy feat to compete, that’s why I lead not listen To others, not even my brothers or father or mother -I smother but aint smothered, high ranking brings high times You’ll finds that those who follow don’t know their own minds When I hit 18 a seen past the blinkers and blinds Unsheathed my sword expressed my feelings wit my rhymes Now im 23 grown wiser, and don’t take no shit Because into the box saying follow me, ‘I just don’t fit’! |
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11-23-03, 04:03 PM | #2 | |||||||
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sorry heres the replies, i keep forgettin......
masta C feat ken dawg MuhThugga blood stained wishes crame mindz my intro |
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11-23-03, 04:35 PM | #3 | ||||||
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that was raw the intro hooked me quik...delivery was as i expected and raw stay up twin and erace your pm box so i can email you details on our side work
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11-23-03, 04:40 PM | #4 | |||||||
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i already did man....its empty so im a watin.....Pz and thnx..it was just a quick keystyle i come up with........pleased you liked it
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11-23-03, 05:24 PM | #5 | ||||||
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nice verse
like the way u delivered it stayed consistent and the flow was good for the most part penned ur feelings well and i agree with what ur saying props best piece ive seen u do |
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11-24-03, 04:21 AM | #6 | |||||||
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IP: 07E0 A9F2
thnx dawgs....................much appreciated........Pz
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11-24-03, 05:09 AM | #7 | |||||||
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I think this piece was very well written but there could have been more to it then just what you had. The idea was really good but I think that you should have put more detail into the actual points being made, you might have also wanted to make it a little longer, other then that I thought it was great, keep it up man!
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11-24-03, 09:04 AM | #8 | |||||
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Liked it.............Another UK artist with abit of talent in here.....UK gettin represented now.....Good piece liked the concept and some of the wordplay was witty
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11-24-03, 11:42 AM | #9 | ||||||
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Good drop, had a lot of word technique to it. A lil vague on some parts but a decent drop nonetheless. I think you should focus on clarity more because that's what music is all about. Even though this is a rap battle site, one needs to implement the basics of music, timing, sequence and repetition. Think about it.
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11-24-03, 11:55 AM | #10 | ||||||
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a few lines didnt rhyme, but I could understand this...
it was aight... just make sure your rhyme your lines... your structure and flow was good and your vocabulary, was mad ill... nice drop ~AshY~ |
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11-24-03, 05:03 PM | #11 | ||||||
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well written piece,
nice consistent flow, nice imagery, i agree this is one of your better pieces, keep elevating hit this up, its a bit long but id appreciate the feedback http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=94043 |
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11-24-03, 05:12 PM | #12 | ||||||
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Ya either lead, or ya lead, in living that’s the way of life
Ya cant do both, well most, cos like a fork needs a knife Not really feeling this peice, i felt that vocab was low, but if this was just a keystyle or something, then it was good. I dunno, jus not with it i guess. Flow was arlgiht, fell off in some places, which is gonna bring the score down lower. 7/10 |
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