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12-03-06, 09:43 AM | #1 | ||||
The Saviour
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LBL Championship Match: 1. Roger Glocks (17-1) vs 2. DaTrusHurtz (17-1)
IP: DD7B 9A68
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12-03-06, 10:40 AM | #2 | |||
I Hurt.
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IP: 2AC9 5FB1
checkin' in, 20 lines?
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12-03-06, 11:43 AM | #3 | ||||
Middle Weight
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IP: 3B3F ACD1
word good luck dawg should be fun
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12-07-06, 12:19 AM | #4 | |||
I Hurt.
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IP: 2AC9 5FB1
Cool with an extension until friday? Had lots of work to do all week n' won't have any time to write on Thursday either.
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12-07-06, 09:08 AM | #5 | ||||
Middle Weight
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IP: 3B3F ACD1
ya thats cool i got alot of battles to write, job interview and all around busy ....juss havent really started writting yet...ill drop friday too
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12-08-06, 02:16 PM | #6 | ||||
Middle Weight
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IP: 98BF 7183
His girlfriend is a bitch, we were suppose to chill and instead
she stood me up........... pulled my pants down and gave me head So far, I beat you 2 times n he's shook from glocks if revenge is suite. then you tried getting a room n couldn't book a spot I see the fear in duke, I dont care im spearing him with the 1-2 this battles career sucicide. im glad I drop hotlines everywhere for you This weak body isn't apporaching me, it'll be a joke to see police officer's tried using his rotator cuff and paris hilton broke free dont mind his wackness cuz he drops sloppy and ignorant this kid wrote Bad..... Micheal Jackson is suing for copywrite infringment he thought he was a pimp even tho there all dogs like yeller but seriously all his tricks juss make u laugh.. like Pen and Teller im bringing heat cuz he wants to plan for this week I heard he's ahead of the curb....as my car flies down the street
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12-08-06, 09:17 PM | #7 | ||||||
I Hurt.
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IP: 2AC9 5FB1
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It's all you, man up to ur weakness, don't stall dude U got so many word problems, I needed an all-nighter just to solve u #1 now, but I'll Strip n' seize ur title n' chill Ur in the Pole Position, but u never seem to Tease us with skill Said u had a job interview? That true? I doubt it, slim Translation: Glocks in a suit tellin' a fat bitch to go out with him I hear u got no friends, but u still try to get outta ur home N' lead fights for human rights, cuz humans have always left u alone Wack fuck, u'll get hurt with the punches I'm givin' K, Roger, without a space n' comma's where u'll work for a livin' U thought RV's easy, but saw me standin' like a great tower N' moved to Plan B, but we know that works for less than 48 hours U've beaten D. Stroyer n' a bunch of newbs ur dying to see again Ur champ run's been such a joke, it figures u just faced a Comedian Please no wack fucks who don't get shit voting on this. Good Luck. |
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12-08-06, 10:44 PM | #8 | ||||||
New to RV
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IP: 139E 0063
IP: 98BF 7183
His girlfriend is a bitch, we were suppose to chill and instead she stood me up........... pulled my pants down and gave me head So far, I beat you 2 times n he's shook from glocks if revenge is suite. then you tried getting a room n couldn't book a spot I see the fear in duke, I dont care im spearing him with the 1-2 this battles career sucicide. im glad I drop hotlines everywhere for you vs. It's all you, man up to ur weakness, don't stall dude U got so many word problems, I needed an all-nighter just to solve u #1 now, but I'll Strip n' seize ur title n' chill Ur in the Pole Position, but u never seem to Tease us with skill Both came really strong but fell off imo. Glocks cuff & Bad line were alrite, rest was played. were as Datrus's otha stuff jus didn't do it for me. Human rights line & tha comedian lines were ok, but I expected a stronger closer. Vote-Roger Glocks |
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12-09-06, 03:48 AM | #9 | ||||
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IP: 2029 97B3
i'm pretty blazed right now, so i'm gonna break this down
His girlfriend is a bitch, we were suppose to chill and instead she stood me up........... pulled my pants down and gave me head i like this line, i think the wording is pretty well done which give a simple concept more of a punch to it So far, I beat you 2 times n he's shook from glocks if revenge is suite. then you tried getting a room n couldn't book a spot this is kind of a played pun, the whole suite/sweet thing mixed in with revenge. so it's a bit played to me, it's a well done flip but nevertheless, a flip. I see the fear in duke, I dont care im spearing him with the 1-2 this battles career sucicide. im glad I drop hotlines everywhere for you i personally think this is nice, i think it's a fresh take on it, you see career suicide shit in verses every now and then but i haven't seen it involved this way, so it's pretty good This weak body isn't apporaching me, it'll be a joke to see police officer's tried using his rotator cuff and paris hilton broke free it's a fresh line, not exactly a dope line, but i like this dont mind his wackness cuz he drops sloppy and ignorant this kid wrote Bad..... Micheal Jackson is suing for copywrite infringment this is probably one of the more generic lines you have, but it's still a solid line he thought he was a pimp even tho there all dogs like yeller but seriously all his tricks juss make u laugh.. like Pen and Teller not really feeling this one so much im bringing heat cuz he wants to plan for this week I heard he's ahead of the curb....as my car flies down the street gives me a funny visual, like i'd see in a cutscene of a GTA game. i like it, it's a cool line It's all you, man up to ur weakness, don't stall dude U got so many word problems, I needed an all-nighter just to solve u i thought this was nice, it'd be a good line without the quotes, but they really do add more to it, nice way to open. another simple concept with a good addition to it which made it a nice one #1 now, but I'll Strip n' seize ur title n' chill Ur in the Pole Position, but u never seem to Tease us with skill i don't really like this, it's not bad but i don't like the Tease half of the pole position relation, it's a little to plain and it's not really a diss that i feel has the potential to be a haymaker Said u had a job interview? That true? I doubt it, slim Translation: Glocks in a suit tellin' a fat bitch to go out with him it's nice that you used the personal, it kept the line fresh. but it's not really THAT funny, and i think that's what drives this line is humor, so it fell short with it's intentions I hear u got no friends, but u still try to get outta ur home N' lead fights for human rights, cuz humans have always left u alone i think this is fresh, to be honest i overthought it when i first read it and didn't understand it. might be the weed. but anyways, after i looked at it again i got it, and i liked this line. Wack fuck, u'll get hurt with the punches I'm givin' K, Roger, without a space n' comma's where u'll work for a livin' i'll be honest with you, i didn't know what the hell Kroger was before i looked at this line. so i looked it up to be fair, and it turns it into a decent line, the only downpart is the K, Roger part, it doesn't seem too smooth. U thought RV's easy, but saw me standin' like a great tower N' moved to Plan B, but we know that works for less than 48 hours i've used a Plan B line before, this wasn't bad at all. the set up isn't very good, i think it should relate to the punchline concept, but it's whatever ya know. the line was solid. U've beaten D. Stroyer n' a bunch of newbs ur dying to see again Ur champ run's been such a joke, it figures u just faced a Comedian this was a bad choice as a closer. it doesn't have that punchline that would make you reconsider your decision by the end of a battle which is why you usually want a good closer. a person usually determines if the verse is good or not by the time they get to the last few lines, so you really have to re-up their opinion with your closer and this wasn't the line to do it with. overall it wasn't a bad battle. i think DTH is dope, and wanted him in my crew on here, so it's nothing against him, he's a nice up and comer but i've seen him drop much better than this, he flashed the potential on a few lines but overall wasn't consistent enough to keep me interested. Glocks didn't drop his usual self either, but then again he is battling in a few leagues and was pressed for time. Regardless, as this verse stands it was an average one with more consistency that basically took the battle, pretty solid verse. vote-Glocks sorry for the crazy breakdowns of each line, but i'm zoned lol
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12-09-06, 06:52 AM | #10 | ||||
The Saviour
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IP: 85D6 9262
Up over no-shows.
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12-09-06, 08:49 AM | #11 | |||
Beginning Your Ending
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IP: F08F CC8D
His girlfriend is a bitch, we were suppose to chill and instead
she stood me up........... pulled my pants down and gave me head im bringing heat cuz he wants to plan for this week I heard he's ahead of the curb....as my car flies down the street vs It's all you, man up to ur weakness, don't stall dude U got so many word problems, I needed an all-nighter just to solve u I hear u got no friends, but u still try to get outta ur home N' lead fights for human rights, cuz humans have always left u alone This was a nice battle, with both starting very well but finishing up a little meh by their standards. I've seen both drop nicer, but respect both of them as a textee. However I thought Glocks dropped a little more consistent that DTH, as Datrus started off very strong but fnished off with some mediocre lines that let him down. Glocks did likewise, but has improved on his wording from some previous weeks. I felt Glocks edged it out with a little more consistency but it was a close battle with both heads coming strong. V/ Roger Glocks |
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12-09-06, 11:09 AM | #12 | |||
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IP: BB7F 896E
His girlfriend is a bitch, we were suppose to chill and instead
she stood me up........... pulled my pants down and gave me head vs It's all you, man up to ur weakness, don't stall dude U got so many word problems, I needed an all-nighter just to solve u U've beaten D. Stroyer n' a bunch of newbs ur dying to see again Ur champ run's been such a joke, it figures u just faced a Comedian eh. wasnt feelin glocks. his verse was pretty bad. quotable was good but i liked nothing apart from that. suite bar was worded weird. datrus came better. word problems was good. comedian hit nice. yeah datrus got this. v/ datrushurtz |
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12-09-06, 03:55 PM | #13 | |||||
ROFL @ u niggas since '04
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im bringing heat cuz he wants to plan for this week
I heard he's ahead of the curb....as my car flies down the street vs It's all you, man up to ur weakness, don't stall dude U got so many word problems, I needed an all-nighter just to solve u I hear u got no friends, but u still try to get outta ur home N' lead fights for human rights, cuz humans have always left u alone Wack fuck, u'll get hurt with the punches I'm givin' K, Roger, without a space n' comma's where u'll work for a livin' U've beaten D. Stroyer n' a bunch of newbs ur dying to see again Ur champ run's been such a joke, it figures u just faced a Comedian Nice battle...I didn't really like any of Glocks wordings which really killed it for me. Dth didn't come as good as he usually does but he had more quotables and better punches. V/DTH |
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12-09-06, 04:15 PM | #14 | |||
Skadoosh!
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IP: BD83 5678
His girlfriend is a bitch, we were suppose to chill and instead
she stood me up........... pulled my pants down and gave me head im bringing heat cuz he wants to plan for this week I heard he's ahead of the curb....as my car flies down the street VS. It's all you, man up to ur weakness, don't stall dude U got so many word problems, I needed an all-nighter just to solve u #1 now, but I'll Strip n' seize ur title n' chill Ur in the Pole Position, but u never seem to Tease us with skill Wack fuck, u'll get hurt with the punches I'm givin' K, Roger, without a space n' comma's where u'll work for a livin' Well, it looks like Roger is feeling the affects of being champ for so long. I honestly thought his verse was below par this week. His opener and closer were nice and had me rollin'.. but the in between was average at best. Nothing popped out to me, just some average punchlines and a couple of played concepts like the suite/sweet line and the michael jackson line. Trus on the other hand had a decent verse, he to threw in a couple of played lines, but overall his level was above Roger's. The opener was my favourite bar, the pole position line was nice and the Kroger line was alright but the wording needs to be smoother. V/ - DTH |
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12-09-06, 04:55 PM | #15 | ||||||
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IP: 98BF 7183
His girlfriend is a bitch, we were suppose to chill and instead
she stood me up........... pulled my pants down and gave me head I see the fear in duke, I dont care im spearing him with the 1-2 this battles career sucicide. im glad I drop hotlines everywhere for you im bringing heat cuz he wants to plan for this week I heard he's ahead of the curb....as my car flies down the street vs Wack fuck, u'll get hurt with the punches I'm givin' K, Roger, without a space n' comma's where u'll work for a livin' U've beaten D. Stroyer n' a bunch of newbs ur dying to see again Ur champ run's been such a joke, it figures u just faced a Comedian dth ended good i didn't like the stated...ummm rogger aint comming like usually but he was funnier in this battle..the stood em up line was pretty funny...y'all both could come better... vote-roger |
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