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Old 04-11-05, 05:51 AM   #1
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feeling empty

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ive fell apart and seperated but still elevated
ive managed to maintain it but still fuckin hated
as I go through this place let me in and invade
talking is cheap cuz we know dat you are play'd
im crazed in the head i'll break your damn legs
im fuckin up the lez your limbs r gonna be in pegs
my minds always alert thats why im always hurt
mixed up feelings inside turn me into dirt
fuck this planet and earth n fuck my birth
im going past life thinkin wat the hell is the worth
and my birthdays pretty soon thats givin me a wound
inside of my stomach thats making me feel im doomed
give me a little room theres to many years ive wasted
all the lies you've created is nothing 2 the tears ive tasted
i guess im just problematic and I feel so fuckin trapped
I feel like im going nowhere so ima just carry on wid rap
nobody in this world cares this world is so crazy
people try to take me but no one can really shake me
only mistake me I really think your tryin to break me
but i don't give a fuck anymore and ive changed just lately
thought my girl friend would always be there for me
now you don't wanna know ya keep on to ignore me
before you even saw me your some1 im gonna miss
we didn't even say our goodbyes or give me 1 lil kiss
the problems im sick of them they all like to mount
im so fuckin ill my problems have just lost count
everyones my fuckin enemy trying to offend me
i was sent from hell im not the type who is friendly
still feeling empty inside of my soul spittin so cold
busting rhymes till theres none left dat i can hold
emcees flee as i crash the scene make ya get on knees
fuck wid me i'll leave ya brain catch a deadly desease
theres no peace of this plannet i just don't understand it
we have no answers to this life god should've never made it
im'a seperate it you should realise the pain is my eyes
a deprived youth whos suffered from all the lies
and cry every night cuz nothing is gonna be alrite
im always gonna find something i don't quite like
just in spite i just try to put up a good fight
how can i do this when im not understood right
no one can beat my flows as i put asleep these hoes
i rock the fuckin show this is my life this is how it goes
next week i turn seventeen and i an't to keen
it's so unreal life goes faster then it ever seems
so im'a have to keep going by any means
nobody in this world will ever know what ive seen

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Old 04-11-05, 02:22 PM   #2
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wow, this was a long read. But worth it. Yo, you got somethin' goin here. Keep this up iight.
Check out my shit and lemme know what's good. Check you out B'.
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Old 04-12-05, 05:06 AM   #3
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Right on bro its a good peice. the vocab was a little lite and the structure was in order. You where able to keep the flow and make it intresting to read. Keep up the good work.
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