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10-05-05, 09:23 PM | #1 | ||||||
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Coming on
In a glad mood while you all a sad groove for hip hop Because you slip a lot at microphones best to rip shop On cats with strong stats stuff infect like bacteria yall Best protect your posterior because this is a superior call Out, as cats crawl about begging me to stop I tear down walls As clowns fall like Humpty Dumpty a bunch of egg heads in stalls My facts are ill no lack of skills yall on crack pills saying I don’t make sense just because you’re fake and dense praying For rhymes, just some sad rabbits with bad habits so have some carrots These scrubs funny and bugs bunny love yall, you cluck like dumb parrots Some cats silence a brute after a violent dispute over drug money Slug a dummy with a glock then eat crummy ham hocks some funny Shit dawg, to fuss is unclean must discuss ways and means to get paid End up in a political controversy critical like a nursery crazy nitwit But I don’t baby sit don’t change diapers in strange ciphers misfits On their own will, like a married man on arid land can’t play around Have to stay down watch my back, master in a continuous way After a strenuous day almost carjacked had to use a tremendous AK A horrendous display of fire power now my empire tower like federal Buildings |
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10-05-05, 09:30 PM | #2 | ||||||
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Joined: Oct 2005 Status: Online Text Record: 0-0 Audio Record: 0-0 Graphics Record: 0-0 IP: CF74 5D3A mylink (http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=210364) gladbag View Public Profile Send a private message to gladbag Find More Posts by gladbag Add gladbag to Your Buddy List Yesterday, 09:58 PM #3 gladbag New to RV Posts: 7 Joined: Oct 2005 Status: Online Text Record: 0-0 Audio Record: 0-0 Graphics Record: 0-0 IP: CF74 5D3A my link (http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=210364) gladbag View Public Profile Send a private message to gladbag Find More Posts by gladbag Add gladbag to Your Buddy List Yesterday, 10:21 PM #4 .Lola Cruez. II Leave me alone.I'm sleep! Posts: 1,973 Joined: May 2005 Status: Offline IP: 56B1 4C65 Good Lil verse here you have here...I liked the flow and you need to stop putting captialization in each line..Do it like this Agljdagl;kjdag;lkfj;agd, adgjkl;d;agkljd gj;ljdsg. Got it?..The flow is kinda choppy in some-places but that's alright. I'm liking the lil wordplays you have here..some are force so try to be relax and just let your idea's flow, I'm digging the Metaphors too, so keep that Up.. Keep writing peace. __________________ -In the Lab..... ....Rehabilitating Myself- "Open Mics" Your Time is Up. Closed Eye's |
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10-08-05, 09:10 PM | #3 | ||||||
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it waz tight
i rate it a 8/10 best line Best protect your posterior because this is a superior call Out, as cats crawl about begging me to stop I tear down walls As clowns fall like Humpty Dumpty a bunch of egg heads in stalls
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tay in this bitch shoot 2 kill :shoot |
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10-08-05, 09:44 PM | #4 | ||||||
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taelor THANKS FOR THE REAL NESS FOR REAL YO
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